after the passion has ebbed
our legs still intertwined
your hand rests
on the naked dip
between my ribs and hips
as the other
traces my spine
we whisper secrets
exposing ourselves
before you doze
your head is buried
between my bare breasts
my chest rises and falls
in time with yours
my fingers weave
through your hair
as i wrap my other arm
around your shoulders
and hang on tight
because i know
you'll be leaving soon
commitment has never
been your style
so i breathe you in
and live in the here and now
feeling warm skin
and emotions
melting into mine
i know it won't last
i know it will hurt a little
or maybe more
than i can admit outloud
i know
but it's better
than sleeping alone
Author notes
Written October 24th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- sweet, glorious, love by PrInCeSs AnAsTaCiA.
300 points, ended January 29, 2006, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Sad
Most people will recognise the truth in this -- except maybe the last line? Very nicely written.
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A poignant portrait of a one night stand. Wonderfully sensual in a sense but still sad that you know he will leave soon. So many mixed emotions expressed. Loved it.
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This is beautiful. It takes you there and you can feel the mixed emotion. Luck for your contest; this should serve well for you!
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"commitment has never
been your style"
This is so familiar to me.
But at the same time...
Maybe I've never heard it before at all.
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bittersweet faretheewell to an affair, sad that so many guys and girls walk away from perfect couplings and love personified to the umpteenth. theymisso ut on so much more~~Artis
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i love this sensual write no gory erotica just a lovemaking treat, a bitter sweet love but a great read well deserved silver lolxx
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oh my lord....
i love it -
That's hott.
Amen, sister. Amen. -
awwwwww...I really liked that one....very descriptive, imagery was [retty good,it was jsut all around a great poem. Keep up the good work~
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great!
Beautifully written depicting your insecurities so honestly. Fantastic! The little descriptions of your bodies mixed in so effortlessly with the emotion surrounding you both works really well here. Good choice of vocabulary. Keep up the good work!
mel xx -
So profound and honest - it hurts to read the ending. Easy to read and understand and words are few and mean so much.
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oo very expressive - i know what you mean.. living in the here and now, you feel like you gotta take the chances as they come. I especially like the end,
"i know
but it's better
than sleeping alone"
tis good
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Very nostalgic write, shows the bittersweet side of love, especially loving someone who is not the staying kind. Excellent work. Very emotional and sweet.
~Sherry~
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