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The Need for Love

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Loneliness,
a need for love
a tear reflecting high above
that single star
that dimly shines
on loneliness’
perpetual fear.


 

Not born on high
to happiness
her sighs collected in a shell
that he now spies upon a beach
placing his ear, he hears them well.


 

He hears a lonely girl out there
with so much love, and yet the fear
of never finding one so dear
with loving arms
to hold her near
and then he sees
he has two there.


 










a reply to Drops of Tear to Drip and Pour.. by raspberry 



Author notes

to my favorite AP grandniece... raspberry!
Written October 24th, 2005

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  • -Mary-Duffy-
    October 25, 2005
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    brillant!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Great, so very, very good, I read the reply of this poem and I think you done it wonderifully. good luck in my contest.

    Mary


  • wbiro gold member
    October 25, 2005
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    glad you finally saw this poem, raspberry, and that your sorrows are behind you!
    your grand uncle!


  • raspberry Greeters member
    October 24, 2005
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    Oh.. my great grand SweetPlum.. What to say.. ur single poem vanished away all my weariness and tears.. its like a tissue sent from across the seas Yeah.. true that i was feeling sooo sad yday.. no specific reasons as such.. but a sort of lonely and pressure at work place.. and petty things like that Now am fine on seeing u write such a lovely piece for me.. Thankyou dear.. You could probaby refresh ur IM now..

  • ill-neva-cryout
    October 24, 2005
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    wow this is great i like it wow the need for love is a deep need!!


  • Kitty Forlorn
    October 24, 2005
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    Moving

    This is truly beautiful, you can really feel the longing here.
    That fear that goes with it too!
    The sighs, those sounds..."collected in a shell"...powerful imagery that gives a soft feeling. So much love and to have those fears too, all too familiar. It seems those with the most love, the most depth, and the most feeling have the most fear, because they get hurt the most, as they give nothing less than their all, and know not how to do anything less.
    And then a surprise on the end.
    Very concise, poignant, and lovely write my friend.
    ~~Kitty {{{{


  • wbiro gold member
    October 24, 2005
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    well, I love your 'wounderful'- coming from a vampiry poet, it is a high compliment! Now don't change it! lol


  • vampiry Julianna
    October 24, 2005
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    This is a great write you did a wounderful job on letting the emotion pour from this write and i love the flow of this poem as well it was very amazingly written my favorite part was:
    "Loneliness,
    a need for love
    a tear reflecting high above
    that single star
    that dimly shines
    on loneliness’
    perpetual fear."
    agian you did a wounderful job on this write keep up the good work
    *~vampiry julianna*~

  • wbiro gold member
    October 24, 2005
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    Thank you, oh sparkly one! lol


  • wbiro gold member
    October 24, 2005
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    thank you very much, Di! So nice to hear from you! You caught me with my 'tinkering' pants down, however! lol changing pronouns and tenses... it gets very messy sometimes, even in a simple poem like this!

  • Gogetalife
    October 24, 2005
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    Awesome

    Wayne, lovely poem..I know those feelings of loneliness and I am sure many will relate to this wonderful piece..we all do need love in our lives..you write with such a passion..unbeleivable..great job my friend..keep it up


  • masterblaster gold member
    October 24, 2005
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    Hi, nice, think you have a problem on 4th line second verse does not read correctly,sweet little poem not your usual but pleasant, all the best, Di


  • Celticmoon
    October 24, 2005
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    She will absolutely love it!

  • wbiro gold member
    October 24, 2005
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    thank you, my Southern Bel, now let's see how my AP grand niece reacts to it!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 24, 2005
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    Hi, Lyrical (or is that hi-yaaaa! as in karate chop! lol) The two arms of men? They're unfortunately designed to hang their dumbly, leaving so much emptiness in the world... cruel nature!
    Edited on Oct 24, 3:05 p.m. because ''.


  • Celticmoon
    October 24, 2005
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    Oh this is simply in a word.......BREATHTAKING! Sweetness and sincerity drips off every last word. True emotions flowed heavily as this piece took form into a refreshing loving and caring masterpiece.

    Wonderful piece of artistic beauty!

    Blessings
    Bel


  • WishMeAway--x
    October 24, 2005
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    like i said BEAUTIFUL

    This was absolutely beautiful! one of those poems that brings tears to your eyes and making you want someones arms around you! great write keep up the work!


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    October 24, 2005
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    This is so lovely. I have a poem started now about being lonely. (not posted yet). This makes me want to run and jump in those 2 arms Just simply, lovely.

    ~Lyrical

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