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For You

To feel the warm brush of the wind
Like the warmth of your kiss
And see the ripple of water
like the depths of your eyes

To feel the sun shinning on my face
Like the radiance of your smile
The brush of green leaves
Like your gentle caress

But I don't have you
I have a forest glade
I don't have you yet
Till then I'll imagine

Author notes

im not really sure of this peice myself and usually idont write these kinds of poems but i did so id really like to know wat u think of it bad or good
Written October 23rd, 2005

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  • Sidewalk-Rampage
    October 23, 2005
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    I think it is good.

    To feel the warm brush of the wind
    Like the warmth of your kiss
    And see the ripple of water
    like the depths of your eyes

    That part was my favorite. It has a lot of feeling into it