Adoni, oh my,
Was that guy
Who Cut off seventy King's thumbs
One might say he's dumb,
But maybe he was drunk on rum.
Adoni, don't be a bum
And run away today.
Don't flee,
Stick around and see
How things are going to be.
Adoni, on my,
You're going to Jerusalem
Because you were dumb
And cut off those's kings thumbs
And their toes
Which this shows
That what you chose
Was wrong and really blows
So now you're going to die.
By: Sharcu(Tim)
Author notes
And Adoni-bezek fled. And they ran after him and caught him, and cut off his thumbs and his big toes. And Adoni-bezek said, Seventy kings with their thumbs and big toes cut off have gathered under my table. As I have done, so God has requited me. And they brought him to Jerusalem, and he died there.
(Judges 1:6-7)
Well, if you read the poem without having any idea who Adoni-bezek is, then you'd be totally confused right now. So after you've just read this Bible verse that talks about him, I'd suggest going back and rereading it cause it might make more sense now. So ya, Adoni is the guy who has 3 Bible verses in the whole Bible, but he's mad funny for what he did. Seriously, cutting off all the toes and thumbs of kings. I mean, ya, it's kinda sick when you think about it, but ya know, it's funny so I wrote a funny poem about it. This is super free verse rhyming, almost like a rap. If I ever start a white man's rap band (we'll be the whitest white guys around... not trying to be racist), but anyways... .> lol, so ya. Hope this brings a smile to your face (in which case that's kinda sick cause your smiling because some dude got his thumbs and toes cut off because he did it to 70 other guys.) cause that's the purpose of this poem, I guess. 
Written October 22nd, 2005
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I had not read this in the Bible, but I will... This is interesting and I'd love to learn more about this person.... You are as always a fantastic poet... Thank you for this lesson....
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friggin schweet!
I can see someone from back then talking about a story in the bible. Many have I'm sure. I mean... shoot they mensioned Lupin the 3rd( heh... >_< from cartoon network) In a recent rap. heh... its awsome though! <33 -
awesome write sharcu, adoni-bezek is certainly a unique character to do a poem on! i have extended the date of my contest to tuesday the 28th so if you want to enter it you can. in terms of my contest, you do well in the story aspect and the rhyme is good too, unfortunately the meter is not the best, but you still might get high enough for some honourable mention points if you wish to enter the contest.
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Hey there. Thanks for reading my poem and commenting. I really appreciate it. And I'm glad I made you smile. It's always nice to know that I put the smile back into someone's day. God bless you.
--Tim -
How often we forget that it is ok to smile a bit in our rompings through biblical verse. After all, King David, danced practically naked in the streets in joy over the return of the arc of the covenant and embarrased his wife
You made me smile and that is always good for me
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lol awesome Sweetie you are so random and you have done a wonderful job on this poem. Keep up the amazing work because you are amazing and very awesome. Don't ever doubt your peotry skills. I love you
Kelsy
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great job i agree with them i liked it, you gotta keep it up lol. and if ya dont i cant do anything about it except WINE till ya do! lol arent i just annoying!
take care
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Thanks for entering.
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WONDERFUL POEM
This was wonderful. I did so love the ending. You did a teriffic write here. It was a pleasure to read. Keep writing for the Lord. Youy are a wonderful Christian and you love for God comes shining through in your writing. God Bless you. Sandy AP Mom
Edited on Oct 22, 11:33 because ''.
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