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My love

I know i want to love you
but i know you don't want to love me back
so in my heart forms a deep crack
for the love i i have for you could never be for me,
when i try to tell you how i feel you flee!
I look at you, you turn your head,
and you don't care for the tears i shed,
rivers of tears filled with feelings for you
so i know that the love for you is true,
and someday i hope you will open your eyes
and see the pain that's overcome my life,
and realise
the love i have for you!!!!

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dedacated to anthony!
Written October 21st, 2005

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  • iwishuponastar14
    October 26, 2005
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    wow sonja. This is soo sad..
    It rhymed well and it flowed like a dream!
    great job!
    xoxox
    kayla

  • Aimee Dechow
    October 22, 2005
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    omg awesome wording girl i feel the same way i love this poem did you show it to him but anywho i love it


  • Locke
    October 22, 2005
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    Your poem reflects exactly how you feel, and I like that. I love the imagery as well. It's so easy to relate to your poem, since I have felt that way too, along with so many others.


  • Eruvande Almare
    October 22, 2005
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    Very good work with this poem. You displayed your emotion and poured it out into words on a page. I can easily relate to this poem because I have felt exactly the same way, pretty recently in fact. Don't you just hate it when you feel so much love welling up in your heart, and the person that love is directed to doesn't even know you're alive. Oh I know the feeling! Anyway, good work and keep writing!

    ~Elizabeth~