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Zonia

 

Zapped by love here on AP
and foundering in its endless sea
he crawled to her door, a wretched wreck
love-tattered and torn from toes to neck-
she opened it wide to hear his plea.

 

Only a fool would have done what she did-
to a perfect stranger and hear his outpour!
His unreal situation and misery
that he created for himself and most likely for thee-
to understand it was indeed a terrible chore!

 

Not only did she stay and suffer thus
she has yet to close her open door.
Many things about her remain a mystery
in her distant land across the sea,
her continued friendship he marvels at, and adores.

 

In this simple poem he sends her love
it is the meaning of this friendship, for 'he' is me!
If she ever asks, I’d tell her so,
and I'd mean it more than she'll ever know.
That is what our friendship means to me!

 

Another day arrives, I log on to AP.
Whose name do I look for, whose name do I see?
A name that transforms my page into a home
from one who can cook and keep a house neat and clean
even from across the distant sea...
my page turns cold, I feel alone
when her name I miss, and I'll confess this-
my heart
is a pool of emptiness
when she's not here on Allpoetry.

 

 

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A stanza-based acrostic, because five lines just aren't enough here!
Written October 22nd, 2005

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  • condor gold member
    November 21
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    What an absolutely delightful dedication to someone who means so much to you. I do not know Zonia but I will make it my business to find her and take a gander at her page...If she is still here that is. Simply delightful in every aspect. I often wonder how people can come up with these dedications as I myself would find it difficult to speak so. You did a great job and it flowed so well.


    • wbiro gold member
      November 21
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      pure inspiration, I think (though this one I had some ground to make up... lol long story)... 'Zonia' is Anna Emkah now... ah, I see a lot of forced rhyme here... probably in fun... (hopefully in fun...! )


  • dark-idle-pixie
    October 24, 2005
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    Truly an endearing dedication.
    Beautiful


  • suseann
    October 22, 2005
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    Recall the song? Ain't No Sunshine When She's Gone! This reminded me of that fabulous melody.Zonia is a spectacular lady,I know her also.This was a great tribute to a strong friendship you've penned so talentedly my buddy!~~~Suseann


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    glad you enjoyed it, Jo!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    thanks, knockout, and luv your motto! lol


  • lavender shadows
    October 22, 2005
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    Very sweet write! Yes, indeed five lines wouldn't have been enough to say all this. And yes, very creative with the Z! I can see why she loved it so much, it's beautiful! Great job on this Dad!

    your doting AP daughter


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Well, Aunt with the cardboard halo! thanks you very much!


  • NoWayJo
    October 22, 2005
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    hey there wbiro! really sweet poem for your online person. you really did well considering the "Z" too! take good care and stay in love!

    Jo


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Wicked- a truly high compliment! Thanks, J!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    thanks, Cheryl, glad you enjoyed it!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Wicked- a truly high compliment! Thanks, J!


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    thank you, bottomrail, on both counts!

  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Thanks, Truly, I just noticed it's a lower-case 'p' in Allpoetry! But yes, I debated on including the mention of this site or not, and included it, since it is a central theme in the piece, and I was thinking of readership beyond AP!
    Edited on Oct 22, 12:36 because ''.


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    thanks, cool, for another fine comment!


  • TrulyLoothy
    October 22, 2005
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    I think that if you spelled out Allpoetry once you could do it the rest of the time too..but I would have found a way to leave that out of my poem if it was mine,


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Thanks, Calvin, for catching the it's/its possessive form glitch! I must become more possessive!

  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    thanks, Eva, for the who's/whose 'possessive' form catch- you can see I'm not a very possessive guy!
    Edited on Oct 22, 12:21 because ''.


  • xxemokevinxx
    October 22, 2005
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    This was wonderful! I love how it was an acrostic, that was really cool. This poem made my day! It was very cute and very sweet and just all around brilliant.
    -Kevin


  • B Chandler
    October 22, 2005
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    this is sooo freaking superb and its as if youre peeling away layers of yourself in this write....
    love it man love it
    Aunt Rae


  • Junk About Funk
    October 22, 2005
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    Wicked

    Awesome Job!

    -Junk About Funk


  • whispersoftly
    October 22, 2005
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    Wayne this is amazing, is a really really beautiful write she must be a really special lady for this kind of attention well done unique and beautiful as always xx


  • SexyAngel0418
    October 22, 2005
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    WOW... This is an awesome stanza based acrostic!!! It's the first one I've seen like this!!! I really like this one!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

    PS It's really sweet too!!!

  • Calvin-n-Hobbes
    October 22, 2005
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    This was a beautiful acrostic, to anyone whoever lucky you are! I liked much of it, and see that you have a poetic through even maintaining a form.

    Calvin

    PS S1 L2: it’s-->its

  • Dull Red
    October 22, 2005
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    AAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWww.....beyond incredibly lovelily lovely love poem!! i really like the way that you wrote it different from the other idioticly cliche love poems!! congrats on finding such a wonderful person!


  • Autumn Whisper
    October 22, 2005
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    awwwwwwww, this is so sweet, so beautiful, and beautiful writing too, i love the way you have done the big letters
    nice one
    best wishes as always
    -Cool Oasis-
    P.S. I wanna do stuff like that i can't wait for the next free gold membership

  • Shadow Goddess
    October 22, 2005
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    This was nice. I do believe the "who's"s should be "whose"


  • Celticmoon
    October 22, 2005
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    Always a pleasure to read your work my dear.


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Well, you lucky devil, leander! For her cooking and company I must sail the seven seas! lol


  • leander Moderators member
    October 22, 2005
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    awe, this is truly a beautiful poem for indeed a wonderful lady... always prepared to share a good laugh or a sad tear...
    Luckily I happen to live in the country right below hers so one day if I ever get that high on the map, I'll surely try to visit her

    Truly an excellent write

    Leander


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Glad you liked it, Anna.


  • wbiro gold member
    October 22, 2005
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    Thanks, moon!


  • Anna Emkah
    October 22, 2005
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    Oh dear, oh dear, I do not know what to say. This really touches me as celticmoon said. You are a romantic, intellectual and funny man and I think I'll never really understand you, but this "stanza acrostic" is very beautiful. You even managed to put my little roses at the side. You're an amazing guy and FRIEND. Thank you so very much for this tribute. Anna

  • Celticmoon
    October 22, 2005
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    Oh my dear I do believe Zonia will be very touched by this piece. Something tells me your words will touch her heart like no other. A wonderful tribute you have masterfully created with such love, honesty and sincerity.

    Nicely Done My Dear!


    Blessings
    Moon

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