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Modern Day Fairytale

She waved,
And beamed a smile.
He returned her thrown kiss.
Already late for work, he called,
“I love you, don’t forget the milk.”
She knowingly nodded to him,
Hushing him to hurry.
As he drove off,
She waved.

Author notes

This is in the form of a rictameter. I thought it might be interesting to write about what a modern true love may be. I mean what couple doesn't eventually remind one another to get the milk? OK enjoy.
Written October 22nd, 2005

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  • Erica Weeks
    August 20, 2006
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    wow how true is this? i go through that just about every morning!!! great write, thanks for the comment.........keep it up


  • ICOMMANDyou2boogie
    December 22, 2005
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    extremely wonderful..thanks for sharing.

  • boilerjim
    November 17, 2005
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    I love poems like this! I write a lot like this. Check out some of my stuff I think you will appreciate it. Thanks for the thoughts and the words!

  • Girl with a dream
    October 23, 2005
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    very good and the simplicity worked ..like it
    lucyx


  • xJaimeex
    October 23, 2005
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    I really enjoyed this. It made me smile. Good Job!!


  • TrulyLoothy
    October 23, 2005
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    it reminds me of an old memory...it was agood rictameter


  • ordinary days
    October 23, 2005
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    Wow.. I like this a lot! Aren't moments like this precious? I'm sorry about the contest--I wish you'd been able to enter this; I don't know how to allow prewrites, so I just didn't.

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