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Take me with you

I don't want to be here.
I can't stand it here,
I only came here for you.
Then you left.
Take me with you,
Don't leave me lying here,
Don't leave me hanging.
Don't you love me?
Don't you care?
Please, just please, don't leave me here.
I can't stand them,
I am not like them.
Take me with you.
Whatever you do,
Just please, take me with you.

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Written October 21st, 2005

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  • So-Alone
    October 24, 2005
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    hey i thought i comented on this wel oh wel i love it!

  • Juicy-Fruit
    October 21, 2005
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    hey, good write,i especially likes the "I can't stand them,
    I am not like them." section, you conveyed your desperation not to be left alone really well.
    Jen.


  • forbidden-colour
    October 21, 2005
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    brilliantxxxx

    wow !!!! wat a brillaint poem 1 of the reasons i enjoyed it is because my family moved across the county and i hate hense the poem black village lol anyways its a reli good write i can understnd completey wat u were feeling when u wrote this keep writting hun poetry is a good way to express wat u r feeling inside keep writting u have a real talent 4 this keep it up !!

    sophie xxxx