Zagreb. Main square. Old musician with his accordion sited on the small chair. French chanson in the air.
Then, I saw two aged, in their eighty, looking each other. He asked her:
Would you care to dance with me?
Her answer was smile, with love and passion.
I cant believe that I saw that.
They were dancing in the middle of the square, looking each other deep into the eyes.
I smiled and cried at the same time. That was the best I ever saw.
Eternal love.
Then, he approach to me:
Please, wipe your tears. Live only your smile. You will dance tomorrow.
Author notes
Thank you Sunrising for Featured
Title
Chanson d'amour
Chanson d'amour, ra da da da da, play encore.
Here in my heart, ra da da da da, more and more.
Chanson d'amour, ra da da da da, je t'adore.
Each time I hear, ra da da da da, Chanson, chanson, d'amour.
Ra da da da da
Ra da da da da
Chanson d'amour, ra da da da da, je t'adore.
Each time I hear, ra da da da da, Chanson, chanson, d'amour.
Every time I hear
Chanson, chanson, d'amour
Written October 21st, 2005
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Franch chanson and music from accordion always was unique and perfect inspiration for all sensitive souls. Onether great personal experiance.
~Sonja~ -
very sweet, sentimental narrative. thank you for entering. peace be with you.
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Thank you she flees for your time to read my poetry and for so nice comment.
Happy Holday Season
~Sonja~ -
This reminds me of the old Plaza De Armas of the ancient and old squares in Chile, Bolivia and Peru....I can see the memories of before...small, dark bands...old couples, dancing because of long love or habit or too much wine..the natives silently watching with their cheap cerveza...I like this simple, short piece very much...
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A very nice write. Good luck in the contest. xXxHannahxXx
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Thank you ShesNotBeautiful for such a nice comment.
~Sonja~ -
Absolutley amazing! I guess you could say this poem gave me warm fuzzies. I loved it, the imagery of the elder people who are still in love. So adorable. Such a beautiful write!
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Sweet and romantic! The last line really hit me, great write!
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Thank you BBR.
~Sonja~ -
good
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Thank you Lost.
~Sonja~ -
awwwwwww thats soooo cute!!!!!
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As your name said NoWayJo. No. I am not going to win this contest. But, thanks to Sunrising, who has dilemma about trophies, this story was Featured. Your words and support means a lot to me.
~Sonja~
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Thank you Kat to stop by and to read and comment my story. Yes, this is nice backgroud. I like it also. And I like to dance.
~Sonja~ -
Thank you Sylvyrwyng. Your comment is so nice, with a "smell" of romantic heart as well.
No, this background is not from AP. When I found it, I said: this one I need... Color and graphic is just right for this story.
~Sonja~ -
Thank you Yvon for your kind comment. I am not familiar with French, and I will try to write it correct: Chanson d'amour. Sorry if I make any mistake with this title. Very sensitive, soft and...everything we need fron great chanson.
~Sonja~ -
Sketch wants more room
Sonja,
Really find your concept strong. The idea of mental and ambiant atmosphere surface from your words. I only wish this particular piece were more evocative of the "French chanson in the air," and somehow more involvement with the mystery held between the two older lovers eyes and contact. Their love is so magical that their dance could make time stand still, and the city along with French chanson everthing else is dancing. Also, what song was frenchy playing?
P.S. I'm into intimacy and this piece has potential for further development. I could be wrong, but your piece tells me what I've said
Sincerely,
Yvon -
really a very pretty piece of writing Sonja. it felt like a very romantic means of marriage proposal..."You will dance tomorrow." really enjoyed this read and good luck in the contest!
Jo -
this is so sweet! you can see the love between the two dancing and the longing to dance in the one who is not. i liked it...b/c i like dancing...anywhere....any time! lol and kool background!
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Ooops... almost forgot. I really like the fan background. Delicate and soft. Is this one that is on the list after you become a silver or gold, or is this one that you have hidden away? *smile* thanks again hon.
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This is so wonderful and romantic! I love this story. Sweet, nostalgic and truly beautiful. I love stuff like this. Brings a longing to have the same love that lasts over lifetimes and beyond death. Thank you so much for this.
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WAW! What a great comment. Thank you Poison-IVY for reading and such a nice compliment.
~Sonja~ -
How lovely. I love a good love story. Especially when you're describing internal love. You did a very good job poetically describing internal love from your point of view. Great! Great! Great! Wrtiting.
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Thank you flying...I am brething and watching this world with all my senses. And, yes, this is one of those situation what gives us a hope.
~Sonja~ -
I am glad you like it. This is a real story with real tears.
~Sonja~ -
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You have a good eye for what actually goes on in this old world.
Nice sentiment. I like the interaction between generations - give the world a little hope. -
This is one of the best poems that I have read on the internet for a long time. I liked the way you brought the characters alive in a very subtle way. The poem was understated which made it much more believable. It was a romantic poem that was also sophisticated.
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Thank you ChicaLinda
~Sonja~ -
great
This is a sweeet story, very touching.
Missy -
You are welcome! I'm so sorry not to have points enough to reward the HM . I'll be featuring each one of them as I get the opportunity and means (points) to do it so.
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Thank you Sunrising
~Sonja~ -
Such a lovely romance you have here!
You showed a lot using such a small place
Not only the thoughts but the words dance on your story.
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Thank you for your nice and precious comment. I am always trying to do the best, but it is not always possible.
~Sonja~ -
lovely
This is beautiful.
This was a mixture of dance and love..and with elderly people. It was fantastic.
I love it.
It was full of imagery and emotion.
Great job!!
Keep up your beautiful work!!
~Midnite Rae -
I agree with your comparission with rose blooms. Maybe just because of this reason you can find some rose between books pages or somwhere on other hidden place. Or, those rose in your heart...
And about dance. What could be better between two lovers except dance? Of course when it is special like this one.
~Sonja~ -
I agree with your comparission with rose blooms. Maybe just because of this reason you can find some rose between books pages or somwhere on other hidden place. Or, those rose in your heart...
And about dance. What could be better between two lovers except dance? Of course when it is special like this one.
~Sonja~ -
Sweet...."The tender rose is not the first that blooms in the season, but the last to wither away"
You made me smile with this one. Reminds me of a special dance I had once.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you. From time to time I am also surprised how life could be strange and where it goes. But seing this picture was surely something extraordinary.
~Sonja~ -
excellent
Beautiful story . Your work is like "Encaustic Art" burning into the mind the importance of love. Brilliant in reality of life ,tender in expression and showing the beauty of love going on for ever.. Well done and thank you for writing and sharing. -
Thank you Jeremiah to stop by to read my poetry and to make this very nice comment and for all of your nice words here.
~Sonja~ -
Thank you Steadfast. I am glad that you like this story.
~Sonja~ -
This is a fantastic piece of writing. You have a lot of talen and I really enjoy style. I will definitely be looking to read more of your work in the very near future. So, please keep on writing and keep on being the beautiful person that I can definitely tell that you are. God bless.
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Thank you Carol for this nice and sweet comment.
I am always trying to be focused on the people, no matter how old they are, their feelings and nature all around. For me, it is very important to see everything and to understand everything. Sometimes, it could be strassful, but it worth to see picture and dance like this one. I dare to say that that helps me to write poetry, stories and novels.
Maybe that was my wish to live for that kind of love.
~Sonja~ -
What I find most interesting is your approach. It's a minimalist contest (I suppose) and thus you use a style that corresponds. It's an interesting idea. It strips everything down to it's basic elements...to only that which is important.
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Thank you Joe. that a was very special situation and very unusual to see...That was reason for my tears. I am glad that you like it.
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you know, usually people don't write about "that" age which better be forgotten. that's a very nice tribute you pay for those who stay young forever. very gentle and nice piece, sonja.
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