infant
cocoon shelter
his embroil against from
harnessed in lamp's womb innocence
of predators swallowing up his youth
for survival of the fittest
stung by many species
eaten alive
infant
Author notes
prompt:"franklin's mould farm"
In a list
A contest entry
- i command you to enter! (not really but i'd be nice if you did!) by nobodys-girl.
300 points, ended February 4, 2006, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - {Metaphors Have Wings} by ultimate beluga.
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What did you think
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wow morbid... i like it!!
i admire the fact you can write in form! the imagery here is really vivid and dark, but also alot more interesting than the usual dark imagery written into poems!
i really like the ending, i feel that this piece ended stongly and the 'eaten alive' imagery was creepily dramatic!
strong write, thanks for entering
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thank u
Thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my poem. It was amaizing that u felt it was interesting. Haley27
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wow morbid... i like it!!
i admire the fact you can write in form! the imagery here is really vivid and dark, but also alot more interesting than the usual dark imagery written into poems!
i really like the ending, i feel that this piece ended stongly and the 'eaten alive' imagery was creepily dramatic!
strong write, thanks for entering
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a good form and a good poem - not read a rictameter or written one for ages, some dark imagery here, aye survival of the fittestsm let's get darwin's bulldog on the case, tom huxley.
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful critique on my poem.like the humor on this one lol.Haley27
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This is really good form poetry. Great job with it. You did it in a very creative fashion. Good job and keep writing
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well its a richtameter
and it was written off a prompt picture but not seeing the picture it is a little hard to relate, was it a morbid photo? cause this is sort of a morbid write . -
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thank u
Thank u for commenting and responding to my poem, and yes it was off a photo promter. Very morbid, which I usually I'm not too much in dark writing, but every once in a while I can bring the dark side to my poems. Hoped u liked. Haley -
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I'm the same way I don't write dark stuff but I wrote a couple the first
one I wrote I put a note saying it was my first attempt at writing dark and someone commented very informatively and then said he read the note and said "you have to be kidding me"
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Thank you for the gracious comments and liking my poem. Haley27
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This is quite a morbid poem you have written out of the picture, but I really like your interpretation of it
'an infant eaten alive' --> this one made me think a bit... cause technically, a foetus isn't able to live on it's own, but practically... it is living... quite good to embed that in here
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck...
I also want to apologize that it has taken quite some time until now to start judging this contest... but I hope I'll be able to close it today
Leander
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