I opened
the first chapter
of my journal of love,
And there it was crumbled
and spotted with tears that
had been driven from my eyes,
I gently caressed the memories
with the slight touch of my hand,
for they held the chapters of my
heart,
I slowly begun to read
as each line reached into
the memory of my soul,
page by page I gingerly
turned as if I was reliving
each moment, pausing
to close my eyes,
savoring each memory,
As i came to the last page
faded with time,
I was reminded by the
writing of my own hand,
Nothing last forever,
But there will always be
another place in time,
And I will see you again
When Heaven and I intertwine.
Author notes
I tried to make this look like a lamp
to reflect where there is light there is hope..
Tears
Written October 19th, 2005
In a list
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A contest entry
- Big Dogs Part Two " Invite Only" by blondone.
600 points, ended June 16, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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it does look like a lamp
i love this
its so full of feeling
of hope even though the lover has died
an amazing piece of work
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Oh myyyyyy
WOW this is so sooooo awesome!! I LOVE it this is the best thing I have seen written in a lonnnnnng lonnnng time~i especially liked the last 9 stanza's amazingly wonderful my dear friend!! ~Huggggggs, Love Kel
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sweet
i thought this expressed a certain memory and it was brought to live in such a stong way it was a very enjoyable pome... i thought the memory was very well rekindeled... and i would like to read something else of yours in the near future... the title was effective to the whole meanimg and reflection of the pome overall it left me in a sate of beliving that you will be reuntied agin with the person you longed for very well done...
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awww....this at the end sounds so sad, just waiting to die to be reunited with the person she wrote about, I hope it can come true but feel for the lady who needs to die to be happy. great write.
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A deeply touching poem you have penned here that truly does reflect the light of hope amidst the pain of lost love. well done and all the best for the contest my friend. - oh I am a goof today, didn't notice til now contest finished. slaps my forehead to wake -up
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excellent~
I agree this is very beautiful and touching indeed...
Loved it...
Best of luck in the contest....
I have up a new one won Gold for this ...drop by if you can
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Soooo beautiful!!!!
Wow,this is an amazing write my friend,I absolutly love it!!
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This is one of your best!
So beautiful and touching...
I would like your permission to use this for your poem of the week on your week in my series?????
Amazing!!!!
Bookmarking
Lynda
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Tearz, This poem DOES look like the reflection of the lamp of your life. WE all meet some bumps along the way, and gosh darned, they hurt! I'm so sick of people saying they will only make you stronger. Writing your life, and ONLY YOU can make you stronger. Only two "medicinal" errors! LOL Line #10: "begun" should be "began".
5th line from last: "last" should be "lasts".
I love the sentimental thoughts you find so poignant in your life. Great expressive poem!
Love,
Shana
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deep and sad, good story and message in this. something i have really been thinking about alot. every one looks for love. sadly ,, mostly is doesnt seem to be the answer. if we dont feel loved before a lover, it fades fast. good poem
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I remember reading this before..
Somehow it has taken on a new meaning for me now..
Isn't it the most heavy feeling in the world when someone you love passes on? And nothing can take or lighten that burden? Love weighs so much..
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Excellent
Shey, this is such a beautifully penned piece of work.
I really don't know what else to say.
I'm speechless at this moment in time.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
*S* Cynthia
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beautiful~
So beautiful tender and heartfelt...
I have tried to do a shape poem like this and cant for the love of money
Hope this gets the gold...it would in my book
Hugs
Susan~~~
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that wuz so beautiful! i wuz wundering if u would b my friend? my username is babyz, so check me out and let me no! GREAT WORK
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Awesome poem and it does look like a lamp.
This almost made me cry because you could have been talking about me. I have journals tucked away and in them I captured every single moment, even every sweet kiss of a man I loved so much. I'm happily married now but I can't bear to part with them. He died a couple years ago and I found out on my birthday. so all I have are my journals.
So sorry for rambling on, but I still miss him and always will.
This was such a great poem.
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LOVELY
It feels great. An' let me tell I love tears,you're great.I can feel every word of "PAGES".May -
The flow of this poem is extraordinary. And I know I have sat down on the floor with my journal in my lap, and have thumbed through the pages feeling everything I had felt when it was first written. I think you tackled this concept outstandingly well! I love the last few lines, they really brought the poem together! Amazing!!!!
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Lovely
I think your thought flow very nicely and you've had a lot of practice putting them down on paper, nice job, in fact a beautiful job, i think you could probably get a bunch of these together and publish them, especially with the idea of making a shape on the page of the words. You could start a fad.
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That was beautiful and heartfelt!
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Wow nice job with the lamp... it was already a good story in itself + with the shape.... makes it that much better
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awe this makes me made cause I had a trophy for this poem and they deleated the contest... Mad just mads me
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Reading again
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Very nice. Very... interesting lamp shape. I wonder what Freud would say about it. Three bunnies for a great write.
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I've already commented but thank you so much for this entry I love this poem...
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Oh the tears are falling like rain from my eyes this is beauiful writing ~ and I love the form the flow and the imagery great job on this very well written poem, love the shape it looks really good...the authors notes just add the topping
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and spotted with tears that
had been driven from my eyes,
^ my favorite lines.
It really paints a picture in the reader's mind, and I love it. Amazing. You should have won that contest, lol. -
i'm in tears now! that was great!! very touching and i could feel the emotion in it. well done
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how pretty.. thinking of the light in the window that some Army wives do for their husbands (I did it for V when he was in Iraq).
Love never dies I firmly believe that.
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Thank you so much for stopping by, no love never dies, it always flickers deep within the heart, Hope you are well,
big hugz across the miles.
Tearz
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hey i could see that now, i wasn't sure at first. But i like your symbolism with the lamp. lovely poem.
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I see the lamp easily here. Very nicely done on the shaping The poem is just a beautifully penning of the heart. It reaches in and embraces, you can feel the love, the loss, the longing and a slight smile for all the joy that way, that is lingering. Great one! I adore this.
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Well I think it looks like a Victorian style lamp. Very well versed in regards to turning the pages of one's life past regrets, to the acceptance of forgiving light and moving forward with a clean slate until in the divine palace we meet again.
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This is cool
And you wrote it on my birthday.Or at least posted it.A poem is a journal of your life.I like it -
That was really good, different, but good. Keep it up! Stacey:
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Beautiful words and visual~
We will always have our memories to go back to just as you have written here so beautifully. They are priceless to us and there to visit whenever we please.
A beautiful display of emotions and the presentation is spectacular to see~
A wonderful piece dear poetess~
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aw, the lamp is cute... a beautiful and hopeful piece, this lamp, written for someone who sounds like they too are a lamp for you.
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There is always that hope of tomorrow.. I mean when we think of those who have passed on before us..
But then I find myself by scent or taste of some food, a walk we took or laugh shared right there in that memory, I believe it helps me to ease the pain.
I feel your heart in this my sweet friend..
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I write in a journal too.I have done so since I was about seven.Sadly I didn't keep them but I've always felt the need to write down memories good or bad.This was a touching write.Thank you for entering and good luck Helen
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AWESOME MASTERPIECE
Tears,
This is wonderfully penned and is inspiring to me. You have created a beautifully written memory. Awesome is the style in which it is writen. I dare say it is a masterpiece. Love and hugs...
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Oh my.. this is one of my favorite pieces you have penned... Great job. I think your creativity has shown through brightly in this piece!!!!
Melanie
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Awesome! Bravo! Clapping! Wow Tears I think this must be my favorite to date. This touched me so much and I am so glad to be able to come here and know that you will always have written something that will just make my day! I love this! I think it's kewl how you made it look like a lamp! How creative you are!
Blessing
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WoWzA
An amazing job and the poem does look like a lamp.
Tears, this is awesome. An absolute joy. WOW. I hope you od very well in this contest.
"I gently caressed the memories
with the slight touch of my hand,
for they held the chapters of my
heart,"
I LOVE THIS STANZA. So gentle, soft, and personal. Filled with the emotion of what makes us human.
AWESOME WORK. ~Pam
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This stunning in both form and content!!! Funny how when we look at old writings and photos we feel the need to touch them gently, as if we were caressing the past if only for a moment. This is a lovely poem, so very very touching! Karen
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