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Tell Me

Your voice is
Sad.
Your smile
Is weak.
You should be happy.
Why do you feel
Otherwise?

It was your wish.
I want you to
Be happy.
I let you go
Because of that.

Tell me why
You turn away.
You avoid me, like
I am death.
But I am not, though
I am close.

Tell me why, when
I look into your
Eyes,
I see
Sadness.
I see sorrow.
It overwhelms.

Tell me.
Show me.
Tell me what
I am to you.
Show me who
You are,
Your heart.

Author notes

This is my current situation.  Do you get it?  If you don't, then you're an average person.  If you do, then you can understand.
Written October 18th, 2005

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  • DreamingMoon
    December 6, 2005
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    judged good- Good poem i can tell there is emotion there.....im an average person


  • pianoman13
    October 18, 2005
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    This seems hard to deal with. A person who seems sad but was let go to be happy and is... still sad. You can really understand a person just by how their eyes are. When I look in the mirror and think I look into my eyes and they seem lost. I love the flow of this poem and how it's handled. This is a great piece both thematically and written. Great job