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I cant feel my toes

There was no shadow in our hearts
There was no light in theirs
No sympathy
No recognition, realization
Their icy blue eyes
Reflecting my soul
Imagination my death
Surrounded by fire
Choked by screaming smoke
I can’t feel my toes
I can’t dry my blood colored tears
There is no emotion
On my frozen face
Only my sullen eyes
Staring back at those icy blues
Their finger on death holding the trigger
Agonizing shadows
Blurring skies
Whilst I choke
As I cry
As we die

Author notes

it was for an english project.  and reflects upon the haulocaust.
Written October 18th, 2005

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  • Kochibo
    February 7, 2006
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    Very nice. Sad though, deep and critical. Lots of betrayal and pain. The imagery was great, icy blue eyes really gave me chills. Nice write~

    ~Leasha