I'M SORRY, BUT...
I've misplaced my trust, seems I'm unable to find it.
(10/18/05)
Author notes
Written October 18th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- One Liners by katie-jo.
450 points, ended August 28, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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great poem. i know lots of people that i feel this way towards.
i like your point, and i couldn't have said it better.
thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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great. you really deserve winning gold!
I like the point of the poem.... speechless...
Keep on writing - I'm keeping on!
Stop suicide.
Joey
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AWESOMENESS!! This is so wicked!! In such a short quote u have expressed numerous feelings..this is very clever!!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
hugs n kisses
preets
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Hmmm...this is a very thought provoking right. Its point blank and comes and hits you straight in the face! Like it or not, here is what it is with my trust right now, it says. It resonates as well...perhaps this one-liner is for a friend who back-stabbed once? or a lover who two-timed? You never know...just makes the reader think and probably visualise this in the context of his or her own life's circumstances.
This also reminds me of the Major Arcana Tarot card 'The Fool' who says, "Trust again, learn to trust yourself". I could feel that message ringing out loud as I saw this one-liner.
Best of luck in the contest and in all you do!
~Charishma
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you ran a really fair contest with a ton of entries, and some really great winning choices in the end ThisIsMy. thanks for your comments to this write!
Jo -
Ah trust... once someone has played with it, it can be lost easily, and take quite some while to find it again... I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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ohhh JO JO......did you look inside my heart? after all......You may have forgotten.......you thought it would be a safe place to keep it.....
......LOL.......love the thoughts you left me with on this one......have a clappie guy....and come get your trust back......you might be needing it for your new love........
Huggs
Mally -
I like this, very witty, and very nice! thank for entering, and good luck
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oh believe me One-Last, it's been used in the heat of an arguement before. I told one of my friends here on AP how it was said during the course of an arguement and now it's making the AP contest circuit! now that's poetic justice!
Jo -
a nice line to tell somebody you hate them...and oddly enough, one I might use someday. Thank you for entering, this was certainly...different. In a good way. And thank you for putting the quote in too. This sort of makes me laugh a little bit but also makes me want to cause trouble just because I look forward to saying to it someone.
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hey Doc...my poetry always has a ring of truth to it!
you have to read the comments to your poem later on. some of this is just too funny. you related it to yourself, but everybody else has too. especially someone called Elfin here.
Jo -
Now I'm really chucking...
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it is funny Doc...it was actually a line I used during one of the arguements back at home, and now here it is, hitting the AP contest circuit. who would've thought, you know?
Jo
P.S.: If it ever wins even so much as HM, I'll have to let him know to refer to me as a "poetic" bitch!
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Jo,
I know this isn't meant to be funny necessarily, but I can't help chuckling. There is so much here... Well, you know...
Doc -
I don't know why it's doing that Life...I only changed to one line. no changes to anything else. I just re-typed the title in again, maybe some AP glitch...??? It's still appearing as "I'm Sorry, But..." from here, but I don't know how the replies are passing over...
Jo
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welcome anyway. by the way, it doesn't show, but have you changed the name of the poem, because the system msg that came showed: NoWayJo (im) replied to your comment on I, saying:
can be done Life...no prob! already have the comma there so I'll just edit it to a single line across...and thank you!!!...... so, have you changed the name to 'I' the name as i see here in the poem doesn't seem changed!
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can be done Life...no prob! already have the comma there so I'll just edit it to a single line across...and thank you!!!
Jo -
great! :)
wowe!! this is lovely, and feeling sorry for you though!
all the best for the contest, and, may be, you can turn this one into a one liner from two lines, by putting a comma, or a semi colon!
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thanks Vic! when I read your contest details, this one of mine immediately popped to mind. and I liked the "Amen" comment myself...
thanks again for your comments, I do appreciate!
Jo -
3 Stars ***
oo this ones erm. little harsh one..i loved one of the comment above telling "Amen" .. that was lil ironical...
nice write from you too.. take ares and have anice time my dear friend.. just keep it up.. your humble little friend.. .. 
... ... - vic ( who else? )
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well, it was actually written for a contest, the theme of it being a confession in 15-words-or-less, Gran. this actually was a sarcastic attempt at "confession." still didn't win though!
Jo -
Very profound, these two lines, yet they can be taken so humorously too - if you can't trust yourself, then...?
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I meant it .. as your write made so much sense to me.. Thanks for noticing my Amen lol.. And I wish you peace of heart.. Catressa
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lol Catressa! loved your simple little "amen" to this! it speaks volumes, you know?
Jo -
Amen...
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very insightful Sad! really appreciate you taking a peek and leaving such nice comment to my writing here...
Jo
P.S.: be back to read some your other poems later today. mouse seems like it's feeling better this morning. at least for now anyway... -
thank you April! I appreciate your very nice comment to this writing!
Jo -
great!!
hahha this one made me laugh!! haha you cant find it huh? sounds like some one asked you to trust them, some one you just can never trust, so you gave them a sarcastic reply. love it!! once again, good job joe.... -
these are good words and i like them.you did very good writing for this.
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thank you for the applause-thingy and your comment to this write, Alive! I truly do appreciate!
and if you're receiving great comments to your poem, it's because it was a good poem! I did enjoy reading it very much, so really keep up the good writing, I look forward to more!
Jo -
Wow - I really liked this. It was kind of humorous in a sick way. And thankyou for all of your wonderful comments. I love getting such great compliments from great writers like you!
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you're so very sweet Blue. I really appreciate. How old are you if you don't mind I ask?
Jo -
oooo i like, the deep simpleness to it. i really liked it. sorry i'm not goot at finding words to comment with. It was graceful and moving. it also made me kind of smile at the end.
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feel free to Space anytime! always be careful with those whom you are suspicious tho. I learned to trust my instinct and intuitiveness...but good luck with the "quote!"
Jo -
This is awesome. I must absolutely use it sometime...prefrably in a blow-out fight with a suspicious loved one. I think the look on their face would be a true Kodak moment. Lol! Much enjoyed.
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you're too cute Zayra. i love your comment...cause last time I said this to "someone" all they answered was i was a "b...h!" and you give me kudos! LOL
Jo
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well, I can say it TWICE in one BIG breath lllll.
Jo -
This is not a metaphor, right JO? Just kidding! I love it!
This says it all but what is fascinating is the juxtapostion of pain and sarcasam because it is not often that anyone feels the freedom to expose their lack of trust this bluntly. Great writing, as always! Zayra -
says it in one breath.
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thanks Ether! I appreciate your understanding...
Jo -
thank you Happily...came to mind reading the details of your contest!
Jo -
you can use it anytime! feel free! no royalties, not credit to the author, nothing! I would be proud you should use it!!! means I raised you right...LOL
Jo
P.S.: have you changed your name? I know the DIJTB is you, but what's the Don-thing?
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thanks Linda...I do appreciate.
Jo -
excellent writing
You really expressed so much emotion with the words you chose. Very impressive. Trust is a BIG issue.
etherealforu
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Great job and good luck in my contest!
amanda -
Loved it;)
I love that line...I hope you don't mind if I use that one someone
That is one for the record books.....I wished I had that line a few weeks ago.......
Thank you for sharing this piece and best wishes to you in the contest
Looks like a winner to me.........
DIJTB
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great confession.. I like this the best.. keep penning ..Linda
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thanks Chris! just seemed one of those "confessions" apropos to the contest stipulations, you know? I really appreciate the comment...
Jo -
Blunt
Very to the point confesion. It was clever how you said "seems I'm unable to find it." cute, short and to the point. I liked it. Nice job Jo
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