Silver loops jingle on her collar as she gasps in delight
Her Master tugs the middle fondly while rocking through the night
Their sacred relationship is not only made up of lust
There are other things involved such as loyalty and trust
She loves her Master more than anyone else she knows
She'd do anything for him, even if kept on her toes
He, in turn, gives her all that she may desire
while getting his own satisfaction, he sets their nights on fire
Toted by a leash attached to her bondage collar
Her quiet, passive ways only make her stand taller
in the eyes of her one and only and within his heart
Both would be instantly lost if they were torn apart
Her cries of passion fill the air of this fading night
Her Master continues to drive her to each coming height
Ecstasy is what is found in their limitless love making
though it seems her innocence would deny truth of her taking
She is but a child in a young woman's form
Her Master takes great care with her even if he's torn
He teaches her the ways he's been taught before,
but her innocence is not tainted, she just seems to gain more
Flesh slides damply together in their union
Passion peeks to its highest in their lovely fun
Crimson marks are made all over each other
One symbol of ownership, loving one another
Day breaks out and still they move in unison together
Perspiration soaks their skin, but that could hardly matter
Their bliss is the only thing that they really see
This couple have eyes only for what they need
Further cries of passion all throughout the day
Both so tired from their heat, but not willing to delay
in their actions that mean so much, a silent "I love you"
They continue until they collapse from exhaustion old and new
Her reward is her Master's happiness and not to mention his pleasure
Her gift is her own bliss, and being his precious treasure
There is nothing they could ever have wanted more than one another
Their love is most unique; they'd be satisfied with no other
Author notes
Not sure if this was what you were looking for, but I gave it a shot. 
Written October 17th, 2005
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Not your best rhyming poem in my opinion, but still a good write. That collar came up again! *makes grabby hands* WANT!
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Hm...I forgot that this one rhymed. My bad.
The last line really did give me a lot of trouble when I was writing it. Come to think of it, it really doesn't go with the mood of the poem.
As for the romance. This is a type of lifestyle where one is Master and one is Pet. There is romance, but in a much different form than you probably know it as.
I do appreciate such in depth comments though. Helpful critiques are always wonderful to get, and I'd love to have more readers like you. Thank you for taking the time to tell me what you truly think.
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ooohh DOMINANCE. i havent received another entry along these lines yet but i must say it was interesting to read. I dont know if romance fits in here the way i perceive romance to be, but each one to its own and if you felt that this was your interpretation of intimate romantic erotica...then so be it
I liked the way you guided the reader with your visual aids...alot of detail in this poem, which always helps the reader get a deeper feel.
I'd like to give you a bit of feedback on your form if thats okay with you. I felt that although your rhyming scheme was consistant throughout the way, your word choice in a few lines were a bit dodgy and seemed forced (She'd do anything for him, even if kept on her toes)
Also keeping in mind the theme and intensity of the passion throughout the poem i felt that you could definetly work a bit with the last line Their love is most unique; understanding might be a bother, something more sensual or passionate would definetly leave the reader with a wonderful afterthought.
I tend to scrutinize all the poetry in my contests so please dont feel that I didnt enjoy your piece or that you have not kept up to my expectations...because this was really good
thank you for entering the contest and good luck 
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I'm glad you like it. Best of luck with judging.
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now i really like this, youre in my top 5, but its gonna be hard to narrow down. so ill come back to that after i get recharged from dinner
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Thank you.
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Very nice write... very nice indeed... good luck in the contest!
S~
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*goes to read it over immediately* Thank you for pointing that out! I hate typos! Haha...I don't know about trademark...but I am obsessed. 
Thank you for your comment.
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"relationship in not". I'm thinking that should be is instead of in. That would just be a tiny mistake though. The flow of this was quite nice. I can also see the trademark Rose Dark Thorn BDSM theme in this.
Nicely done.
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I've written better. You'll get betetr with practice. You're already doing good with Flayme! 
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I'm jealous of your erotica skills, so I think I'll applaud them.
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How wonderful for you then! I've only experienced it in online roleplaying. Just getting into that actually. I love the idea of the relationship and the emotions it can produce...Though I can't see myself as an actual pet. Anyway, thank you for your comment. It makes me happy for some people to know what I'm talking about here.
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Thanks sweetie.
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Oh, I have someone who likes to be dominated and dominator too. This one in particular though, wouldn't know where to start when it comes to dominating. I agree with you too. Thank you for your comment. It is really appreciated.
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wonderful.
oh em gee.....i loved it. this is exactly what i have wanted for all my life...and im experiencing it. a very good write. and the bond between master and slave will never be broken. its one of the greatest feelings ever. To be consumed by one person for the rest of your life.
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AWw! And yet another fantastic write. yay!!!
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I'm more of a femdom fan, but I do like the emotions and descriptions that you involved in this peice! That type of love and relationship IS unique and no one needs to understand it to make it so. It is what it is, simply.
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I'm glad I can always start you off with a good night's sleep...or whatever you may be doing. I hope you can get into writing again as well. I've read here and there and I like.
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wow, what a way to finish my night's readings. Hopefully I can get back into writing now that my series is over, but I haven't been feeling to well lately.
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I've written hotter. It's okay about the applaud too. Don't worry about it. I love writing this kind of erotica...as if that wasn't obvious! Ha!
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I'm glad you liked it then! I have plenty more like this if you ever want to take a look. It's fetish. Best of luck in judging your contest.
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lol rose your really good at eroticas. this was very hot!!! lol
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very good for a first entry im glad its starting out this good already! good luck
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