People wonder why I dont trust them,
I look at them and laugh.
Because no matter how good their acting is,
I can always see through their act.
But not you.
I set my complete and utter trust in you,
gave you all i had,
hope, faith, respect.
I pretended that you were different,
though i noticed the neglect.
Someone once warned me;
Told me you would turn around and run.
So stupid me,
Cocked and loaded the mother fucking gun,
handed it to you and prayed,
prayed that you would have enough decency,
to at least say goodbye.
Say goodbye to everything we had before you commited such a horrendous act.
Social suicide.
You tore me apart for the inside out,
you took my secrets and spead them about.
Life without bestfriends,
is not a life worth living at all.
I am sorry best friend.
You seemed to have dropped the ball.
I can just walk away,
Be the bigger person.
Put a smile on my face.
And when people ask me why I have trust issues,
I will point at you and laugh.
walk away,
and never turn back.
Author notes
I kinda wrote this one off the top of my flat head
Written October 17th, 2005
A contest entry
- Betrayal by Neon Lights.
300 points, ended October 28, 2005, 20 entries
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This is an amazing write! I thoroughly enjoyed it. You spew your anger and hurt, really show us why you behave the way you do. Your lines,
Cocked and loaded the mother fucking gun,
handed it to you and prayed,
prayed that you would have enough decency,
to at least say goodbye.
sound like song lyrics.
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This is a great poem full of bitter truth, the kind that touches your soul with shared memories. Nothing worse than betrayal.
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Nice poem, i know how you feel i have "trust issues" too. lol. very powerful poem love it. x dwy x
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Very nice poem. Loved how you portrayed your emotions in this. And the ending was awesome. It's no wonder so many people have trust issues.....but what can ya do! Thanks so much for entering my contest and Good Luck!
~Fi~
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It's a bit hard to understand because of the sudden add in and drop of the rhyming scheme--sticking with rhyming alone, or not rhyming at all would be best. However, it clearly gets the point across in a hostile tone that allows the audience to understand exactly how you're feeling. Bravo on this one. I can definitely say I relate to the tone of voice emitted in this text. =x
--Dark--
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