i saw you today
which doesn't happy very often
and when i looked over
and saw you looking back
my heart started to soften
i though maybe there's a chance
maybe you actually do like ME
but then doubt set in like it does
and now i don't really know,
when i look into your face, what i see
I see your smile, but i never know why
you smile, I wish i knew
i see your eyes, and i wish i was close enough
to look into your eyes, to stand there forever
i look over, but truthfully i don't know you
Am i looking at a stranger
who just happens to look back
are you looking at me
wishing the same thing i am
or is there more to it than that
Is there something i could tell you
that would make you open up to me
tell me all your troubles
or about the you
i never see
Am i looking at a stranger
who just happens to look back at me
if we could just talk
would the title "strangers"
be set free?
Author notes
this one isn't that great, just getting my feelins out. and trying to make them rhyme. lol i read the poem the end of the tunnel by ostara.
Written October 16th, 2005
A contest entry
- Your most personal poem... by Ostara.
300 points, ended October 21, 2005, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thanks so much! really, your too kind! lol i'm sure whatever you wrote would not sound stupid, i didn't know my poem was inspiring! lol this is actually about a guy i like at my church and when i walked into church this past sunday i looked over and there he was looking back at me so thats where i got the inspiration for this poem. yeah its not a real romantic story lol. i want to read this story you wrote about the character and the guy. sounds like an awesome write. well i must go, its like 11:00 at night. adios amiga!
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Its good! It does flow wonderfully like Ostara said. The rhyming scheme was wonderful. I wouldnt have thought of that in a bajillion years. Thats probably not a word but yea. I stare at people/ things in wonder and I can relate. I hardly ever find the answer I'm looking for. Hmm...Now thats something to think about. This poem is inspiring to me but I dont know how to go off it. Silly me I'll probably end up making somethings tupid in comparison to this.I hope you do goodie in your contest. You deserve to win! TAKE HOME THE GOLD BABY! hehe Lol. Dont ask. Oh yeah In this poem I especially loved the stanzas:
Is there something i could tell you
that would make you open up to me
tell me all your troubles
or about the you
i never see
and
Am i looking at a stranger
who just happens to look back at me
if we could just talk
would the title "strangers"
be set free?
That last stanza described how my character felt like 2 years ago with a guy she had a crush on. Long story. And the other one...well...lets just say thats an even LONGER story that I'll save for another day. Lol LOVE YA! -
I think it good, though, no matter what you think. It has a really nice flow, and I liked the rhyming: it was there, but not too strict and not too obvious.
It's always a bit of a catchi, isn't it, looking at someone, and wondering. You know they say, if two ppl look at
each other for more than ten seconds, they'll end up loving or hating each other, but nothing in between
Wonderful poem, good luck in the contest!
Love, Ostara
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