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I want her

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I want her to hold me, to love me, to touch me,
I want her to take me and make me her own.
I want her to use me, to bruise me, seduce me,
I want her to need me, not leave me alone.


I want her, I need her,
I'll beg and I'll plead her,
I would bleed to be with her
Just let her be mine.


I would die for her, cry with her
Always stand by her,
Not a day passes by
When I don't hear her voice.


I want her to trust me,
I want her to lust for me,
Just let her be willing
To take me tonight.


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Written October 16th, 2005

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  • violetrose
    May 1, 2008

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    This is a great piece! Wanting someone's love and passion is definitely a subject people can relate to. The flow is really nice in this poem, too, and the rhymes never feel forced. It's short but very straight, simple and to the point with an emotional undertone. I especially like the lines

    I want her to trust me
    I want her to lust for me

    because those are two different ideas but still very closely related when it comes to love and passion. Great job!


  • Amazon Huntress
    July 12, 2006
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    Thanks so much, Dan! Really glad you liked and could relate.
    *~Amazon~*


  • FrostBite
    June 27, 2006
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    ATR

    A heart-full well done. An Applaud and a bow kind sir. Thank you, so very much for your write.
    For love so harms. -DAN-
    Edited on Jun 27, 9:18 because 'misspell'.


  • PoeticXDarkness
    January 16, 2006
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    amazing......wow.... damn..... lol. idk. very good. and i can relate thank you for entering and good luck.
    ~Laura


  • scarlet screams
    November 13, 2005
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    The feelings cinveyed here are very defined and elegant. Want of someone's love is a very powerful feeling, and you have expressed it greatly.


  • -faerie-
    October 16, 2005
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    Woah, this is awesome hun, i love a lot!! I can relate to it aswell.... but yeah, i thought the poem seemed incomplete somehow, like it needed an extra verse,but thats just my opinion. Keep the ink flowing hun, I like reading your wirk again xxx
    -faerie-


  • Xero-Cool
    October 16, 2005
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    hell yea thats tight female female love is the most erotic love of all hella tight nice wright mad props resses pieces im out like a fat kid in a dodgeball game peaace and much love

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