If I’m their way,
You’re their quest.
If I’m better,
You’re the best.
If I’m a twig,
You’re bird’s nest.
If I’m the shadow,
You’re rest.
If I’m a question,
You’re God’s test.
If I’m enjoyment,
You’re every fest.
If I’m great,
You’re better than greatest.
If I’m fast,
You’re winner among fastest.
If I’m a virtue,
You’re the place where vice crucifies.
If I’m the truth,
You’re the place where a tainted soul purifies.
Coz the place from where
Subtle horizons arise…
… Is your eyes.
Vichitra Joshi (J.VIC)
Author notes
Option (4) .
Thanks for extending the date... blame the Viruses 
take cares
*Miss Me*
- Vic
Written October 16th, 2005
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look at you wooing the ladies
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hmm it was well written but in my opinion a little bit boring, its the same in every stanza.. although i must say that i liked the last stanza
that was cute.. this is the first poem ive read from you (atleast i think i its
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so im gonna read more i dont like giving bad crits like this
your dear friend Amychu
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Wow Vic....... this is really really good. I would like to meet Nikki sometime. She sounds amazing and you prove that she meaning a great deal to you and that she is a major part of you.
*hugs and kisses*
Raina -
Wow Vic..I really like this one..It is really good..You have alot of talent..Great Job..
Love
HilL! -
I love this!! Whoever it is you wrote this for is a very very lucky person. The whole message in this is lovely and the flow was just awesome. I love the emotional as well. Very light and happy but serious at the same time. Very nice.
Yours always,
Amber Dawn -
Very fine, Vic
An honor for whomever this was written
If this was intended for or inspired by someone
It is easy by your poetry to become smitten
I'm continuing to read it and I'm having fun
Ellis -
Very nice write Vic...I LOVED IT
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wow
i hate you...its so good..why cant i be that good...i really hate you...wow..thats all i can say...andi hate you.....Luv from KiRa - x0x...( i was joking about hating you ) lol
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More than beautiful my dear Vic.
Toooooooooooooooo nice.
Shahrzad -
Its really nice. Love this piece. You have a way with words vic!
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Excellent
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Wow.
I love the way it ties together so definitely at the end. Beautifully written
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beautiful, well written and wonderfully deep. many layers to this.
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Exquisite!!!
Vic, This is a very deep write and I know melpomene must have been very honored by it. Your talent really shines through here. You created beautiful images with your words that flowed so softly. I know I don't get to your page as often as I should and I'm so sorry. Please forgive me. I see that I have really missed a lot after what I just finished reading here. This is exquisite and you get a standing ovation to go along with my applause. Love and blessings for you, today and always. Joyce
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beauiful write!! cewative write with anice tone and good flow .so light and full of emotion . keep penning . i love reading your work.
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PERFECT 10!!!
hi vic...haven't heard from you in quite a long time...
This one's a magnum opus...a masterpiece I must say.Left me speechless till the end...
You see, I didn't know where the poem was going to till I read the last stanza...really really breathtaking.
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guess what.. this poem was made for nikki only.. (melpomene) from whose contest you removed ur poemm bad bad..
- vic to mums ( janice m pickett ) -
i will have to wait for TEN LONG YEARs .. thats good.. lucky me .. what about my kids?? . and grandkids?? .. and great grand kis?? .. and what about my mums rt now?? 
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Excellent Writing
One day....About 10 years from now...You dear Vic will make some beaautiful young lady VERY happy indeed. Your wife is going to be very lucky to have someone as sensitive, caring and adorable as you.
This ia a wonderful poem
HUGS
Mumma Janxxxoooooooo -
aweeee this is so cool, very good write Vic, keep it up boy!
urstruly, cheese master
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Beautiful
Son, this is truly beautiful, you shine through your every word. Melpomene must be very happy that you wrote this for her Thankyou for sharing. Love, hugs and kisses. Mums 
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Vic..I Love this poem..its awesome..good job.well ill tlak to ya later..luvs ya
XxX -
Wow vic that was really good, I love the way your write. It's like the way u talk to people so understanding lol well yea ttyl c'ya
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tee hee.. guess what..?? i stood first in intercollege on the spot poetry writing youth festival .. received a gold medal from state university
.. i went up higher level.. but lol.. i lost it ( my mistake i heard the topic wrong ) .. if i wud have won it.. i wud have been writing as a west zone representative.. ... well.. i will try again next year though..
thanks for nice comment.. and yes..i request.. dun use firecrackers on diwali...
.. we are educated for noble reason.. so no pollution no cracker.. just Diyas ...
thanks again
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Vic you're growing as a poet... your thoughts are getting profound... and your true poetic talent is surfcaing... this is a beautiful poem you've penned my dear friend... I also take this opportunity to say that whenever visit your page it gives me feel of Dewali.. its glittering and colourful like Dewali lights... keep on going uphill... you've a great potential...
mina
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I love this, it is so light and full of emotion A very pretty write, the 2 line stanzas are amazing and suit the whole meaning aournd your poem. I will be sure to read more of your work if this is anything to go by
Love Tink
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5 stars :)
Very nice poem! This is the first one by you I've read so far It has a different diction and format than I usually see, also liked how it was broken into couplets. The ending is so cute! I'm looking forward to reading more by you! And thanx for your kind words, means a lot to me
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hey, wonderful poem with an equally good subject with an equillibrium of usage of words with the weights of a good poet called Vic.. Nice poem.. take Care.. Anu
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A beautiful poem Vic. Sweet and flowing with a sentimental, friendly air about it. This is simply terrific. s and best wishes always ~genie~
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you are sucha beautiful person, i totally agree with ChainGang up there
what a wonderful poem, keep up the beautiful words, this suited that lovely Nikki so perfectly
love as, good luck
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aweosme
great write honey I loved this........... your such a beautiful person.....
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beautiful
I DO miss you sweetie!!
lots! school and I am grounded but you know that well ne ways, very beautiful, I enjoyed the composition of this piece, the short lines emphasized its meaning and I enjoyed how you went on to describe what the person was, you are SO talented!!!good luck in the contest my wonderful Lover!!! Ruth
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Vic..That`s veeeery good work, I think ... :} Started very slow with culmination on end .. That`s great
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I really did enjoy this poem. It was very original and I liked that. It also sparked a simple happiness in it that was also nice. Goodjob and thanks for sharing. M.T.B.
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talented!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hi Vic, well great write. I just loved it. I liked it when you rmyed the last word of the last line in each wee verse, it was cool. I just loved everything it about it, but you know what really made me smile was the line (Coz the place from where Subtle horizons arise...Is your eyes) that line is just Wow, I really love it. Well I'm glad to see you writing again, your doing well, great job on this remarkble piece of writing.
Your friend Mary
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whats the rollercoaster thingy in your motto?? Explain me ... pardon my dull dead head
- vic to laurianna ( capital )
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great metaphor in the subtle horizons as eyes. so well written, and thought out.
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Hi sweets.. s
This is fantastic... very different from other poems of urs... I found it very unique and I dont know why but It gave me a lot of pleasure.. so I read it six times.. or more... Its just wonderful and the way u've ended itr makes it worth reading...
an amazing poem by an amazing friend...
take care sweets...
s
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This was awesome vic! I lurveit! *nods* miss you and your great writes! *hugs*
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Wonderful poem Vic! I like it. I hope youre feeling better
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Great poem and the rhyming was cool..Good luck in the contest!!
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iya vic! this is a lovely write
"Coz the place from where
Subtle horizons arise…
… Is your eyes"
I love these three lines
well hey gd luck in da contest
shya!
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.... *faints* beautiful!!! This is an amazing write vic!!! awww..... ... It was worth the wait ... Well written! thankz for entering and goodluck... I really loved this.
Nikki
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