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...Even Still.



 

Secrets lining the corridor to my past
Tattered, torn, sheltered from the judging eyes
who deem themselves better than I.

Cobwebs cling from above Black Widow of sorts
DEAD center. Deaths caused by fate, drown me
several times over.


~Even Still~

Some leaving me frozen in time, cold to the touch.
Frightened of thawing….of feeling…of loving.
Bittersweet to love, means to one day lose.
A hard lesson learned.


~Even Still~

Friendships, once bright with forever,
fade to gray, to darkness.
Shadows remain there in the stillness
echoes of laughter, tears, remnants of roads begun,
but not seen through.


~Even Still~

Heart left bruised by my trust in my toxic friend.
Whose children I long to see, to hold, to comfort
Steel door slammed shut, dead bolted by my brain
but not my heart…..it still cries.


~Even Still~

Marriages, only one of my own…a few husbands “borrowed”
Broken vows, tarnished with lies…not of this woman’s soul
not always anyway.


~Even Still~

“You can lead a horse to water, but you can’t make him drink.”


No room for shame, for what is done, IS DONE.
No u-turns in this life.
No second chances. No use living in regret.


~Even Still~

History remains buried beneath the dust
of tomorrows long past, for the tomorrows
yet to come…a map, a guide, a lesson to be learned.


~Even Still~

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Written October 15th, 2005

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  • sidewinder silver member
    December 2, 2007

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    we all must learn those lessons in life... and sometimes we take the hard road to learn them.
    Interesting perspective!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!


  • SomethingDelicate gold member
    November 6, 2005
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    awesome...and the first stanza really hit home for me. A lot of emotion in this piece.


  • They Call Me Fancy
    November 2, 2005
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    breath-taking.

    This is amazing. So much emotions pours from your words, and honestly this peice leaves me speechless. Great job; that's all I can manage to say.
    ♥ Fancy


  • Kitty Forlorn
    October 24, 2005
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    Powerful!

    Wow, powerful piece Deena! It gave me the shudders at the impact! Very wise and introspective...very courageous too.
    You cover so much, so concisely. When they said use metaphors, you went to town and blew it all away, and me too.
    Nice use of metaphors, well done!
    The shadows of friendships, toxic friends, the no u-turn, and the map from the past....all very powerful ideas and feelings....hit home major for me! You reach in deep, and then lay it out flat, but eloquent.
    Real impressive.
    Luv and blessings to ya, ~Kitty {{{{


  • robert bolin
    October 19, 2005
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    This poem is beyond breath taking to me, Your brilliance out shines us in a shrine all your own, For I am no better than anyone else in life. Your are a poet of many talents whose wisdom is that of a great magician of a craft that many will cease to understand, thank you again for allowing me to read your work and comment on it rob..


  • Sweet Melissa
    October 17, 2005
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    Deena honey, this one is breathtaking. I honestly think this one is my favorite by far. I especially love the lines:

    Friendships, once bright with forever,
    fade to gray, to darkness.
    Shadows remain there in the stillness
    echoes of laughter, tears, remnants of roads begun,
    but not seen through.

    This one was emotional wasn't it? You are amazingly talented.

    Love ya - SKRC
    Melissa

  • Grave-Digger
    October 16, 2005
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    Holy, SWEET. I liked it alot. Kick ass write!
    -Miguel


  • Leo the Lover
    October 16, 2005
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    What a great write you always seem to bring out the truly life altering, human-emotions and true life into all your writes. I love all your writes but this is one of those that just yell read me..... Great job and good luck in the contest.

    Dear Love
    Leo

  • Sweet Briar
    October 16, 2005
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    Deena I have to say this is one of the best writes I have read from you in a long time. Written with raw emotions and I agree with Billie it does take a brave person too look deep within themselves and then write about the past that you locked up for a reason. You did a flawless job on this write. So wonderfully written.

    ♥Jenn♥


  • Simply Ashley
    October 16, 2005
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    Im so glad you are writing again. Very nice. Good luck in the contest honey!
    Ashley


  • faderman1959
    October 16, 2005
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    This is very emotional but very good! Being honest with oneself is one of the hardest things to do in life! The honesty in this made it special! It is a rare thing to find. Your poem showed this very well/ Great write Mistress!


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    October 15, 2005
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    I have to say Deena this is one hell of a write. Truly amazing. Introspect is the hardest thing a person can do. After all, who is brave enough to truly see ones self? You did this with class, style, and beautiful language. You are a wonderful soul, and a beautiful poetess.

    Blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~
    Billie Jean

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