The South-wind seized the willow
That over the water swayed.
Aloft a laughing and dappled stream
The South-wind seized the willow.
From whence I slept on feathered pillow
Fairy-like dreams that did cascade.
The South-wind seized the willow
That over the water swayed.
Author notes
I borrowed my lines from George Meredith's poem "A Roar Through the Tall Twin Elm-Trees"
allpoetry.com/poetry/34016
The South-wind seized the willow
That over the water swayed.
Written October 15th, 2005
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A much enjoyed poem. You need to tidy up line three to get the rhymes right though.
Nicely penned.
John -
WOW -
You took the lines and made them fully your own. I have just read the poem this came from and it was so forlorn, but yours is so light and airy! It is amazing how two lines placed in a new perspective can portray something so different.
thank you for your delightful entry and reintroducing me to this old poet.
Good luck,
Susan -
I have seen this contest, and although I love writing triolets, I knew for sure I wouldn't stand a chance between the entries that could hit this one... and looking only at your poem, I see immediately the standards of quality are even higher than I expected to see in the contest... truly a wonderful masterpiece you've entered hunny
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Love the poem; it so goes with your name. Only question is, 'Where whence.' I was wondering if From whence might be more appropriate as where and whence together is a bit redundant. Up to you either way, a lovely poem. And I REALLY like your background I've never seen one done like this
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This sounds like a perfect day to me!!! This flow is soft and warm like a gentle breeze. It just seemed to sooth me reading this lovely, lovely write!! Your muse is surely back...want to borrow my super-glue???
I wish you the best in this contest!!!! Karen
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excellent~
A beautiful triolet sis
You have penned here
Love the background...but where is the pic of a weeping willow?
Just teasing ya...love this and good luck in the contest
Love ya
Your sis
Susan~~~
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Awesome!!!!!!Spectacular!!!!!!!
I love the poem Willow, however I agree with you the title is okay, but not spectacular how about "Natures Breath" or something to that effect it brings out the repeated lines of the willow? or maybe "Nature's Sway" -
this is very elegantly written and send thought of sweet softness through the minds eye...well done sis
angel
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