Sharazon looked at Kira lovingly as they walked, anxious to get to the Inn soon.
Kira noticed these looks and smiled at him adoringly. "Is something wrong?" she whispered.
The drow stroked her face gently. "Nothing's wrong, Precious. You'll see soon, what I have in mind."
Her eyes glittered with curiosity, but said nothing more.
Once in their room, Sharazon lifted her up, laying her on the bed. He smiled down at her wide eyes before kissing her deeply, running his tongue across her lips and between them tenderly.
Kira's eyes closed, but opened once more as Sharazon's hands wandered to familiar places they hadn't been in years.
"Ready?" he whispered heatedly in her ear.
Butterflies fluttered, but she nodded.
Author notes
If the title threw you off, sorry about that. I couldn't think of anything better. Feel free to suggest somthing.
Sharazon belongs to Opaque Beauty.
Too bad I couldn't make the nature of their relationship very obvious...
Written October 15th, 2005
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A contest entry
- 120 words contest by Gaze.
320 points, ended October 19, 2005, 2 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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It's so hard to capture much of anything in 120 words. Given that I've read Shackles and all, though, I feel ahead of the curve.
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^_^ you know what Im going to say by now....
Im that predictable lol
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I found this very interesting. Why 120? A random pick? Years ago one of my fellow writers, in a writers group which I belong to, started doing 100 word stories and I have tried a few. It is challenging. I consider them kinda like prose haiku.
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You think this is short, take a look at the 55 word stories.
I love description as well, but I don't think I do it as well as Toria. Makes me jealous. 
But anyway, you'll definitely find a lot of poetry and stories to do with Kira and Her Master. 
Thank you for another wodnerful comment. 
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120 words my dear! hehe. Yes I sat here and counted them for the simple fact, I had nothing better to do. lol
.. giggles I'm such a dork sometimes. I don't think I could ever really get a story out in less then 300 words. LOL but that is just me. I'm a big big descriptive fan. Anywho, I see this is about kira the pet and her master. 
Excellent job. Kahy
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Not a bad interpretation you have here. It has been years since they've been intimate, yes...but that isn't what I mean by their relationship. The nature of their relationship is actually that she is his pet and he is her master. But anyway, thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed reading.
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I have to agree with Moxielady, it is refreshing to see this without having to see it all. Sometimes limitations are not a bad think, they cause us to think a bit more creatively.
You said you were not able to express the nature of their relationship, but I think we do get a sense of it. This is obviously not the first time these two have been together, but it has been long enough she hopes he still finds her as desireable, or something to that nature.
Overall you used the space you had very well.
Susan -
Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I love contests like this and I hope you hold more. Best of luck with judging your contest. Thanks again.
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I really liked the sensuality in this story!
Always pleasant to have some glimpse of a very intime moment between lovers without watching the whole picture
The romance and tenderness were very well shown in this story too. Butterflies indeed!
Thanks for this read and good luck in all you do!
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Well, I have a text program that actually counts the words, and when I go over the limit, I cut it down until I'm satisfied with it. That's how I do it. Thank you for your comment.
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This is a wonderful write Rose. How on earth you did it in 120 word I do not know. Good luck in the contest.
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Flaaaayme...You just got your chance. It's in my newest story.
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this. These are actually easier than drabbles. Drabbles are only 100 words.
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A perfect title for a wonderful story. It has so much romance and feeling caputured with just a 120, the ending was just beautiful. Great work.
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Thank you.
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I think the title is perfect, it fits the story very well. The story is excellent. Well done, expressing so much in so few words
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Don't worry Flayme, you'll have your chance.
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I love the title, actually, I don't think that you should change it. I love the sweetness and sensuality that you always manage to capture in such a small amount of words. Great write, sweetie.
(Flayme grumbles in the corner)
-me
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