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Life or death

We can do more than we think,
We are stronger than we seem,
We are not blind when we blink,
And still we forget our dream.

If I'm born one day again,
I don't think that I would change,
I won't stop feeling that pain,
I'll keep living this exchange.

Cause the limits we impose,
Are the limits we can break,
Are the limits we compose,
When we want to take a brake.

Fear of past ignores the future,
Fear of life brings fear of death.
Love others to make a future,
Fight today for one more breath.


When you die, would you like to fade away or burn out?

Author notes

We are much more stronger than we think and we can endure infinitely more than we believe. Give me your opinion on this...
Written October 15th, 2005

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  • Yunalonei
    February 19, 2006
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    Brilliant piece.

    The lines
    We are not blind when we blink
    &
    Cause the limits we impose,
    Are the limits we can break,
    Are the limits we compose,
    When we want to take a brake.

    Are amazingly intense.

    You are so true and have an amazing view of the world.
    xxx


  • Tercil gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    This piece has the brilliant tempo of song and with words fiting so very well also, it will not surprise me to have you copyright this piece for sure. There's also a nice bounce which proves it will be a success! Nice work! Brilliant in fact!

  • shaitus
    October 16, 2005
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    Beautiful
    Intelligent.
    ~shaitus.


  • Ink Shadow
    October 16, 2005
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    There are some good lyrical lines in this poem...But then there are some muddy images, and a few phrases sound preachy...but that can be due to my lack of poetic intelligence!

    D


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 16, 2005
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    Well it is really a great write. a very hope full write revealing the strength of the nature and power of the life and humanbeings . The thoughts are very rare and honestly stating the beauty of the life through and through. The emotions are very sacred and very pure in terms of its immortality and impact over the generatation is just long lasting. The last three lines of the write are the lines sems to be the lines of a any holy book which is enlightening the whole creation with a grace of life too. The flow of the write is very impressive and to the point too. I must say this a marvelous work.prabhudayal khattar

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