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Her

Blazing eyes dancing in a
Dew-fresh, dawn-sweet smile; and her
Swaying to
Pulsations
Deep and
True, so true...

And with all the other reasons to
Adore this soaring soul, there's no
Reason left to leave her
Aura's web.

Yet, the
Dying from her
Passion breeds a
Rhythm all its own and its
Beat is birthing
Magic in my
Soul...

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Written July 19th, 1996

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  • amzolt
    October 16, 2005
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    appreciated

    Some things here are not intuitive...
    Can you hear me, ScarletO?
    Thanks!!!

  • amzolt
    October 16, 2005
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    sweet and light

    Thank you...
    &
    Thank You.

  • amzolt
    October 16, 2005
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    insightful

    Everyone gets what they do from a poem...
    The "erotic" many see is there but the spiritual depth of that woman is the predominant thing to me...

  • NoWayJo
    October 16, 2005
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    written abstractly, but i'm not sure the sense of the poem is the same the others are reading into it. maybe just me and probably just me, but reading it as I did, I think this was a very astute and deep piece of writing.

    Jo

  • ScarletO
    October 16, 2005
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    I would like to have that magic in my soul. That is a beautiful description of your emotions.

  • Marcy Anna
    October 15, 2005
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    Pleasantly surprised

    I love the first stanza, it's so erotic, so intimate I can feel myself in the room, feel the sexuality that's coated by your softer words "Swaying" "Fresh. Very nice.
    I also enjoyed the last line, the way you trail off into your thoughts. It seems as if you've simply run out of words to describe the enchanting scene and all the emotions it's provoked in you.

    I'm not sure what aura's web is trying to symbolize, or is it symbolizing anything?

    Like the two previous stanzas you fill the emotions with illiteration that makes every action and thought seem so alive to the reader.
    "Magic in my soul" Now that is a poetic line. Though you write in first person narrative, you are able to invite the reader into your work by giving us such vivid images to work with. This was a fantastic piece, a rarity on this site unfortunatly. This is what makes filtering through dozens of love-sick-teen poems worth it. You have IT my friend, so you work it.


  • Blackfire88
    October 15, 2005
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    passionate

    wow, another awesome poem...i especially love the last stanza, it kinda leaves the reader with a calm, warm, peaceful kind of feeling....this is a beautiful, passionate poem, great work once again!
    ~Blackfire

  • miss midnight
    October 14, 2005
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    this is beautiful.good job on this. its amazing
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