Nay, do not grieve tho' life be full of sadness,
Dawn will not veil her splendour for your grief,
nor others mute their shouts of sudden gladness.
Nay, do not grieve tho' life be full of sadness.
To live in bitterness is simple madness
when love and nature give their own relief.
Nay, do not grieve tho' life be full of sadness,
Dawn will not veil her splendour for your grief.
Author notes
Nay, do not grieve tho' life be full of sadness,
Dawn will not veil her splendour for your grief
Transience by Sarojini Naidu
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/6668-Sarojini-Naidu-Transience
Written October 14th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Triolet Cento Challenge by SusanL.
600 points, ended October 21, 2005, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This was a lovely poem you used to write your own, and that was just as great as the the first one - very nice flow and deep meaning in these lines - easy to read and understand. Hope to see some more recent poetry from you soon. Keep writing...Thanks for commmenting on my poetry this morning.
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Congratulations, my dear. I knew this was destined to be a winner.
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Thanks Patricia, this won against some very good competition.
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hello margaret
it seems a long time since i came by
missed the eloquence of your voice as proved by this lovely write
elaine
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Hi Elaine. Thanks for dropping in. I'm glad you like this, I'm quite pleased with it too!
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Margaret, isn't it remarkable (not even close) that words comes to us when we need them most? You are such Divine reflection! It's good that Dawn does not veil her splendor. The awakening that heals. Love, Karen
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Thank you Karen. It is splendid, indeed, that we can look forward to the sunrise without fear of disappointment. I have reached the age where I know that patience works.
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How utterly breathtaking, Margaret! You have taken two lines and made such a masterpiece with them. You are, without a doubt, a most amazing poet. Love and Hugs, Patricia
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Thank you Patricia
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Congratulations indeed
This is a fine work. You have an ability to use past poetry and style to your advantage. Modern verse does not produce many memorable lines. Your added lines have that ring of authentic memorableness. Ron
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Thank you Ron. I would rather be timeless than post-modern.
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This is such a positive and splendid poem. It speaks such truth. I applaud the repetition in this poem because it allowed me to focus on the true meaning. Yes, no one will stop his/her happiness for the grief of others. Also, it really isn't worth it to hold onto grief.
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Thank you Zai. I am lucky to have so many wonderful poets to remind me that the storms of life come and then they go. You see, I write as much to reassure myself as for anyone else.
The repetition is part of the triolet form - the first line is used three times, the second line twice. It helps to have such dynamic words as Naidu's.
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lovely
It is so serene, beatiful, cheering, and full of wisdom. You have this extra-ordinary ability to convey so much in so less, and so wonderfully well.
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Thanks!
This morning there was a clear sunrise, with the full spectrum lighting the sky. Now, as usual, the sky is clouding up, and late sleepers know nothing of the splendor I saw earlier.
Thanks for your comment and applause Sau, I'm happy that you are comforted.
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Thanks Karen!
The original poem was inspiring, but I felt there was a mite I could add. I loved your triolet too. 
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OUTSTANDING!!!!!
This is really outstanding!!! I only hate that I hadn't read it before now! You took the original poets beautiful words, and really made them your own. The tone, the voice everything about this just says perfection!!! I am so happy and congratulate you on the gold, you most definately deserve it with this gorgeous pen!!!!
Karen
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Thank you John.
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Thank you sweetheart, congrats to you as well.
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Many congrats on this wonderful poem Merry
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WE do indeed seem trifles before the glory of nature around us. In fifty years who will care about our tears. In five even.
well written (as always)
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Yes, advice to the depressed is often perceived as pollyannaish or insultingly cheerful; but it is common sense. The fact that we are alive is a great reason for getting on with it!
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A laugh often when I read optimistic poetry/advice. Basically because it's over-simplistic. But Margaret, your words are just plain sense. And you know what? What you explain is (I think) exactly why we get over someone's death or our own tragic losses. I guess that make you wise huh?
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Margaret -
I like your choice of poems. I am meeting new OP faces thru this already.
I like that you have taken these lines and keeping with the same tone of the original you have added your own perspective.
Triolets need not have a set meter, but I think that if the original poem was written in a meter or voice then that should be considered.
I can tell this is going to be a tough contest to judge.
Thank you for your entry and good luck.
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Oh MY Margaret. You and I both wrote on grief. I love this it's simply beautiful and oh so true
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Thanks Rae. I love the original poem by Naidu; if you haven't read it, it's worth the time!
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bravo
bravo
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good luck and i love this write
Rae
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