The dark water lies in front of my being
while the rain and current sway it back and forth
The chilly airs seems to whisper bitter sorrows
as my body stays on the peacful grounds
The dark water is something I must past
it is something that all must go through
As it blocks our paths to the lighted cities
I begin to move towards the dark water
as it slowly creeps on to me
Finally the dark water has engulfed my being
while I push my way through its swaying waves
the sorrows within me become apparent for all to see
as I realize that I am utterly alone
Here there are no soft hands to say goodbye
only my fears apparent as day itself
yet within me lies an ever lasting light
my only guide to the always bright city
Author notes
I was looking at the water at night while standing near a dock and saw all these bright lights that seemed so far away...so I wrote this little divy...the point in case anyone decides to read this is that...we all must go through tough times where we feel alone, but we have to make it through to see the good times...well thats the main part of it
Written October 13th, 2005
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wow, this is so good! i agree with laura, it's really beautiful!
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Sorry I never commented on this, and other stuff. This was very awesome, loved the imagery, i guess my only critique would be Mr. Wallish, punctuation, lol. I really liked the ending though, there is a light within everyone, people just don't realize it. Well later man.
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This is beautiful SEBASTIAN! (not Darren) really- very beatutiful- there are no other words to describe it- it seems like something that I would write if I saw the same sight. Good job! glad to see ya writing mre poetry! keep it up! APPLAUSE!!!
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I'm not darren...so forth I don't understand the name d-man
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omG, yay.. you wrote a poem, lol. Awesome job D-man!!! keep it up.
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