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You put the asterisks in my eyes.



This poem has been published in “Eyes of the Poet"

You can find a copy of “Eyes of the Poet” at my Amazon store  astore.amazon.com/thesilverstor-20/102-2357741-1409733  

I am trying to raise money to pay for my infertility treatments and I hope that if you are looking to purchase anything online you will take a few moments to look there.

Author notes


Written October 13th, 2005

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  • J.J. Sass
    November 23, 2005
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    Bravo! Excellent!

    Excellent write Patricia! A very unique and wonderful way to express this love! I have meant to read this piece for a while, but I've just been making my way patiently through all the round four poems. You have really done an amazing job with this. Congrats on making it this far! I'm happy to be in the book with you!
    Best wishes always,
    Stacy


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    November 9, 2005
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    Wow! I'm thrilled. I have no plans to move this. Thank you both. Patti


  • dp robertson
    November 9, 2005
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    well Patricia Gibson-Williams - I have read this again and liked it even more than the first time I read it- accepted frpm me to, congrats, but the comp is still on so leave it here for a little longer

    David


  • l.....
    November 7, 2005
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    Accepted.

  • dp robertson
    October 20, 2005
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    shortlisted


  • becks place
    October 13, 2005
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    excellent!

    I loved the wordplay in this write. Very unique and creative, and the piece just flowed. Bravo to you...this is great work. Best of luck in the contest! Becky


  • NoWayJo
    October 13, 2005
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    very unique poem idea angel and well-written. the title was a definite plus, especially considering all the punctuation included in the poem! really glad I had the chance to read, and good luck to you with the publication venture!

    Jo


  • poeticweaver gold member
    October 13, 2005
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    Excellent flow and word play, thanks for sharing you, I wish you all the best, something to be proud of here. Pen on!

    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver

  • piccola silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    This is really imaginative and I love it. Using marks of punctuation in a poem ... and to describe love. Very, Very imaginative.

  • April Love
    October 13, 2005
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    this is a cute poem and I liked it very much.

  • sugarbear310
    October 13, 2005
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    this is great thanks for featuring it i'm new and don't know very many poets on here yet keep up the great work hope to read more from you soon

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