Finally it's Halloween
Many creatures I have seen
Some were purple, green and red
One even looked like it was dead
Then I heard a piercing scream
God I hope this is a dream
I saw a girl lying on the road
Suddenly I went into action mode
I ran over to where she lay
And with her last breath she did say
Spread my ashes upon the sky
And then with that she did die
I turned around a saw a headlight
Suddenly the world went bright
Now here sprawled on the gravel road I now lay
Was I supposed to know this would be my last day?
Author notes
this was my first peice of poetry ever
Written October 13th, 2005
A contest entry
- Halloween Contest Ages 11-16 ONLY by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended October 31, 2005, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow! Great piece! Your flow and rhyme are really well done and hte piece itself is quite chilling. I am seriously impressed here. Fantastic piece. Happy Halloween. Blessings, Gypsy
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Wow, is this good! The words flowed quite well, and your idea was very original and... spooky, I guess. Nice.
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I like it!!! When reading it I wouldnt of none what was gonna happen, well doen on the flow and everything. It great for your first peice
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wow! ok very distubing....lol..... anyway nice poem i liked it though its kinda sad... nice write...
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Not bad for your first piece, and I'll admit it's usually difficult to tackle a specific theme for a first try. If you worked on the meter a little in the last two lines, made it work with the previous stanza, then I think you'd have a really good piece on your hands. It just reads wierd when the last two lines are super long, comparitavely speaking.
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wowzers! i are speechless with fright and bad dreams i love it
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