Destiny's Dowry (Light Nudity)
When daybreak came, hours I'd seen,
After already haven broken my fast.
Dazed to comprehend, understand, glean,
What I knew swiftly was within my grasp.
I had fallen in Love, no tragedy,
That’s what anyone would be likely to think.
The morning was sweet, dressed in majesty.
But my mind was elsewhere, poised at a brink.
Soon the day's zenith would be upon me.
Heat made the mercury rise in the glass.
Follow my heart, and from my duty flee?
Or allow my long planned fate come to pass?
An echo of my father's voice I hear;
I fear my chamber must foster a ghost.
Should I flee with the one that I hold dear?
Stay where life would be a trial at most?
If we flee, there will be no safe haven.
If I stay, I fear that my soul shall die.
If only I had wings like a raven,
I could escape from Providence and fly.
I must think what will happen to my love,
If we flee but somehow we are caught.
My path now shown by a power above.
The night’s confusion has all been for naught.
I must marry as duty imposes.
The Kingdom's fate depends upon this pact.
My path waits strewn with petals of roses.
Sacrifice love to keep Kingdom intact.
They have come to escort me to my groom.
A man whose face I have never beheld.
Promised before my womanhood did bloom.
Before my Lover's and my heart did meld.
My Love had first come upon me bathing.
A wooded bower with a spring-fed pool
Driven there by a solitude craving.
Escaped guards who were then thought to be fools.
He's obviously not nobility.
As if noble would suffice for my hand;
I could be touched by naught but royalty.
My dowry a kingdom holding vast lands.
He sat there upon a majestic steed.
But his clothing and saddle were quite plain.
The instant our eyes met, I felt weak kneed.
And from his face, I knew he felt the same.
I was drawn by some powerful magnet,
From the blue water, I naked, emerged.
The steed drank, glad for water not stagnant.
A life's inhibitions somehow were spurned.
Our passion did flare up in an instant.
He snatched me into a fevered embrace.
Then we kissed reality distant.
Thinking not of the future I must face.
By the time that I heard my guards coming,
We had both fallen hopelessly in love.
His pledge to come for me sent pulses humming.
I quickly donned my clothing but dropped my glove.
He slipped away as my guards came in sight.
It was the eve before my wedding day.
I didn't sleep at all thru the long night.
Now I have this horrible price to pay.
I paused before the castle's chapel door.
I bowed my head to hide my flowing tears.
From this moment, the sun would shine no more.
I would know sorrow the rest of my years.
The doors opened to the future I dreaded.
I couldn't believe what I then did see.
The Prince to whom I was to be wedded
Twas my love who'd disappeared in the trees.
He stood at the end of the chapel's aisle.
In his hand, he held my single lost glove.
I was frozen in place for quite a while.
Held there imprisoned, by eyes filled with love.
by JAYDA1313 10-13-2004
Author's Comments:
"A special thanks to DKNichols whose collaborated effort produced this newest addtion to my passion for the days of chivalry and knighthood!!!!!!! I love you DK you always know what I am trying to say!"
Author notes
A special thanks to DKNichols whose collaborated effort produced this newest addtion to my passion for the days of chivalry and knighthood!!!!!!! I love you DK you always know what I am trying to say!
Written October 13th, 2004
A contest entry
- 100 poems, more points to come! by katie-jo.
900 points, ended January 18, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful.
This surprised me so much. I didn't know what to expect, every stanza was unexpected, and the end was so perfect. I am such a sucker for happy endings, sometimes when something ends unhappy I get choked up a bit. Thanks for the smile
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
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10 out of 10
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this took my breath away. aobsolutly beautiful. loves the title as well! best of luck in my contest, and keep penning.
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this was really good! beautiful ending and words! i love the flow and emotions in this. great poem! keep on writing!
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Two thumbs up!
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This held me tight, reading and enjoying. All the superlatives choosen here in the comments speak thruth. Still I read the song ones else and saw the movie with another ending. But you did it with own words and that's what is important for most of the things written were exposed ones more maybe with some other words or own interpretation or other persons.
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A very good piece of work indeed. One of the best love poems I have seen. Keep going mate. Good Luck!
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brilliant!
This was a sweet story. I liked it bunches!!! You had me hanging on until the last stanza! I just wanted to see how this ended! I loved the story and just the peacefullness of it all. You truly did a fantastic job! -
GREAT!
Beautiful Poem! I loved it! It is one of the most beautiful poems I've read on this site. -
Excellent
Oh sweet sister, I love this one...so magical, so freeing to find that the man you fell instantly in love with is the one you were destined to marry... Also, if you're looking for a cute poem read Rufus and Nemo that I just wrote and posted a few minutes ago...
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Great job with this, a little long but well worth the read.
I love the ending, and your soft words play deeply into this.
Good luck in the contest, this is sure to be one of the top!
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Captivating, enchanting totally refreshing tw
Captivating, enchanting, exquisitely orchestrated a true tale in the pure essence of a weaver of words the surprise ending ... "He stood at the end of the chapel's aisle.
In his hand, he held my single lost glove.
I was frozen in place for quite a while.
Held there imprisoned, by eyes filled with love." Enhances with a magnificent twist
Thank you for such a delightful read! Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors
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Thank you I really appreciate the encouragement!
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A beautiful piece, and I've always been a sucker for love poems. So well done, keep up the good work.
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Wow now I am at a loss for words ....thank you so very much for a wonderful critique and those encouraging hands clapping.
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Well Jayda, my gast has not been flabbered like this for a long time.
This is an epic well worth reading, which flows with rhyme so beautifully, There are one or two little tweaks required to perfect it, but no matter, a wonderful write.
Though not my type of subject, and despite it's epic length, it kept me enthralled.
Well deserving of an applaurse.
Well done.
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Awesome
I have always been inspired by the days of old when gentleman were truly that and when dreams really did come true. Thank you for your wonderful comments and for your encouragement to keep writing. -
What a great story to read on a Sunday afternoon. Hope for true love never dies.
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I could go on and on about the wonderful rhyming, the great flow, the imagery and just the warm tender feeling this poem leaves! There is beauty in this writing!
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This is extremely well articulated with such elegant imagery and description! I love the energy that you have brought into this piece - so very captivating! Beautiful and romantically invigorating! Lovely write dear!!! Keep it up!!! ~~ ~~
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Oh my goodness. That's one of the best poems I've ever read. Where did you get the inspiration for such a beautifull poem. I think it's all perfect. The ryhme, the story line, the imagrey, the romance. It's got everything a love poem should have. Abolutly beautifull!!!
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I loved the twist at the end. Just when you think she will have to put love aside...there he stands. What a perfect way to start my day. With your words, each stanza was perfectly clear in my mind. Excellent job my friend.
s and ♥
Willow -
very interesting
Well my friend, the ending certainly took me by surprise - almost as much as it did the protagonist in your sweet poem. I like the age of chivalry and this poem had hints of Cinderella in it.It was cleverly devised with details that made ne compassionate towards the unfortunate lady and the ending was not contrived or easily anticipated. Well done. camus -
WOW!!!1AWESOME damn this is a work of art , its so moving it takes me back to the books i have read about the past only its so real i could actually see you at the chapel.....oh if only love could be like that nowadays.....
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Excellent
Dear one... I love this romantic and beautiful poem. It is so touching and sweet and full of suspense, The best part is when they see each other and he's holding her glove... Love this one. -
Thank you for your honesty!!!!!!
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I could be more of a gentleman but "no"- not this one.
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Excellent
ooooh thats is so romantic and sweet. Very Nice very nice indeed. SO touching. You did a most wonderful job on this. You wrote it very well and it rhymed beautifully, with a smooth flow. Keep on writing hun. You're very good.
Peace
*Lust*
Good luck in the contest! You deserve to win with this piece.
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