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Safe ,Sound And Soon

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A soldier sits under the desert moon
but his thoughts are far away
thinking about his wife and children
takes the reality of war away

He is there to serve his country
this fine soldier will sacrifice
he will lay his life down for you
without even thinking twice

Let us pray to bring them all home
bring them home safe, sound and soon
God watch over this fine young man
as he sits under the desert moon

There is no joy in war or dying
the pain and sorrow lasts for years
too many men, women and children
will be shedding millions of tears

So bring our fine troops home soon
let them all come home safe and sound
the silence of the night is shattered
by the explosion of a mortar round

GOD BLESS OUR TROOPS  

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God Bless our troops. Bring them home soon.
Written October 13th, 2005

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  • KevinDunn
    October 15, 2005
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    I applaud this poem, and congratulate you on it, but I think this is a case where "less is more." May I suggest you try it without the second and forth stanzas. I think the shorter version is more powerful.

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 14, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    Thank you for the nice comment Carl. I do appreciate it. I always love hearing from you. Hope all is well with you. Take care and God Bless you. Sandy

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 14, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    Thank you for the wonderful comment. It is appreciated. I do hope they all come home soon. Take care, Sandy
  • melodymaker
    October 14, 2005
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    Very,very,very sad. My heart goes out to anyone who has ever experienced this, I couldn't imagine how it would feel. x
  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 14, 2005
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    Beautifully written.

  • ebaby
    October 14, 2005
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    good poem

    a wonderful poem, let there be peace soon! and bring em home alive!

  • Frozentearz gold member
    October 14, 2005
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    Well you know this is dear and true to my heart
    I will be welcoming my husband home the week of Nov 6th
    and I hope it is for goooood... But alas our fears run away with us and im in deeper fear then I ever was that something will happen just before he leaves..Truly with out doubts, this is a great write and im with you Bring themmm home..
    Godbless and Godspeed to each and every one of them....
    and to there families the deepest of thoughts
    FrozenTears
  • zee1
    October 14, 2005
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    Living in Israel and having a son who will soon be a soldier I really feel this piece - well done. May they all be safe.

  • TCKansasKate
    October 14, 2005
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    Beatiful write! So inspiring!! I loved the stanza:
    "Let us pray to bring them all home
    bring them home safe, sound and soon
    God watch over this fine young man
    as he sits under the desert moon"
    All in all such a wonderful write!!
    Catherine

  • Piccola gold member
    October 13, 2005
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    There's a new movie out now; Jarhead .. it depicts the war very well.
    Everyone but Bush wants our troops to come home. Anyway Jarhead shows the willingness of some of the troops to be there. Good job.
  • expectations
    October 13, 2005
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    God bless our troops and what they have done for us. great write

  • October 13, 2005
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    this was a very nice poem , alot of heart into this and a wonderful thing to do.

    He is there to serve his country
    this fine soldier will sacrifice
    he will lay his life down for you
    without even thinking twice

    Thats a very true stanza, and a heart breaking one, sometimes they dont come out on top, and they did it for us, there families, and no one ever said they had to, it was a choice, awesome!
    ~ vini ~
  • sugarbear310
    October 13, 2005
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    Gods speed for a safe return of your loved one and all who have soldiers at war great piece for the troops and all Americans around keep up the great work look forward to reading more soon
  • a la belle etoile
    October 13, 2005
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    very good! a tough subject, but you captured it well. beautiful!
  • Brokenpen
    October 13, 2005
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    awesome write

    wow this was awesome i loved it top to bottom and yes god bless our troops.. well done thank you for sharing your words with me.

  • Sandygram silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    WONDERFUL CONTEST

    Thank you for the nice comment. I totally agree. I know how badly the Vietnam vets were treated, My heart went out to them. Here is a poem I wrote a while ago about them. God Bless you. And thank you for serving our counrty. take care Sandy

    Here is the link. allpoetry.com/Poem/1488636
  • Painpoet
    October 13, 2005
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    Very good write and as a vetran myself I can appreciate it My only reret is the viet Nam vet did not get the respect that current vets now get I am happy for them but still feel the pain of our welcome home. Thanks for posting this

  • Paint Me Beautiful
    October 13, 2005
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    This is beautifully written, Thanks so much for sharing your words with all of us here on allpoetry, you have an amazing talent. ..

  • xSallyxDollx
    October 13, 2005
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    I love it when you write poems like this - they help me cope with the fact that as soon as school's over I'm losing three of my best friends, one of which I have strong feelings for, to the war in Iraq. These poems inspire me and help me keep my faith. Thank you

  • Rose Chloris
    October 13, 2005
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    WoW! I almost cried. This poem is so sincere and wonderful. You gotta give your love to the boys in camo. Thanks for sharing this great write with all of us!
  • Yvon Cormier
    October 13, 2005
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    Sincerity Par Example

    My mind almost erased "And" because the message is urgent. This works as a prayer and a dedication. Your words are so powerful and real that I'm willing to bet God was watching you write it. I'm just a believer who thinks your prayer will soon be answered.
    Hope is my other elixir
    Yvon


  • Arcomage
    October 13, 2005
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    wow Sandy, yet another beautiful poem you've written for our troops. May god protect them and bring them home soon.
  • Dull Red
    October 13, 2005
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    wowww....i nearly stopped reading this smack dab in the middle of your piece becuase i was getting too emotional. thank goodness though, i did finish through!! Great job on this poem! No matter how many times I read about war and soldiers sacrificing, i get ssooo choked up....problably since it is SUCH an immense topic, with such heartache, victory and all that. Great job capturing that topic!!

  • DAangelDEVILinME
    October 13, 2005
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    awwww thats so sweet and everyone can relate to that,
    i loved it,
    even if they have no family in that situation,
    b'coz we are all human and feel for others,
    i think its so sweet and nice that you wrote this
    and shared it with all of us....................
    Keep up the good and beautiful work

    xXx

  • grannyeri gold member
    October 13, 2005
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    Very well written, with deep emotions and honesty throughout the lines. How long will it take, how many deaths will there be, before this is all over?

  • October 13, 2005
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    Impecable

    Impecable! you know that is just what these soldiers are doing and thinking. I am greatly appreciative for all that they have done. Having lost a dear friend in this war I can truly say thanks for the prayers and yes he went home safe and sound but only in the spirit.
  • OuToFmYmInD014
    October 13, 2005
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    This is a beautiful poem I love it. And I agree, the soldiers need to come home, there is no reason for them to stay. Its so pointless. Anyways, me rambling. Great poem, i enjoyed it alot. Keep writing, you've got the talent.

  • NoWayJo
    October 13, 2005
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    very beautiful poem Sandy, and the closing stanza was simply eloquent. a very nice tribute and a very good poem!

    Jo
  • LadyMidnight07
    October 13, 2005
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    this is awesome!
    i cant wait for the soldiers to come home and for this retarded war to be over. i am petrified my brother is going to get called in, he's in the reserves.
    thank you for writing this, it is beautifully written and shows you care.
    Blessed Be

  • Windworder gold member
    October 13, 2005
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    To live in a world of peace would be the fulfillment of a national dream, unfortunately, after each conflict another always arises. Your attempt to capture the lonliness of a soldier in a sandy desert is admirable.
  • velvet transparency
    October 13, 2005
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    This is a beautiful piece of poetry written to honor our dedicated troops. It could use a bit of polish to make it read better, but the heart of it is very clear and sincerely written. What wonderful men we have who will lay their lives down to protect our freedom!

  • WildlifeDoc silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    This is such A GREAT PIECE. This is such a great dedication to all of our soldiers in this world. May they hold our prayers in their hearts. This is probably the best "soldier' poem I have read. Wonderful job.
  • Linda Sue silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    hi Sis, Wonderful poem! We should be very proud of our troops...but helping people who have spent generations killing each other and anyone who tries to bring peace are not worth the sacrifice of our finest young men and women. We removed the madman...now it's up to Iraqis to decide if they want to fight for democracy or just bring back the madman. Our troops have done enough while the rest of the world except for a few countries have just sat on their behinds and done nothing but criticize the USA and encourage the terrorists (deranged zealots) and done nothing to help. Bring our men and women home. They have made us proud and accomplished their mission. I wish President Bush would wake up from this stupor he seems to be in...and bring them all home by Christmas. What a fantastic Christmas gift that would be to our country. Well anyway, I loved your poem...sorry I got off on a tangent. ♥ Linny
    Edited on Oct 13, 10:10 because ''.

  • shubs
    October 13, 2005
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    This is so touching and if so many think the same way then what deters the soldiers from going out there.Why? If all there is to it,it is a call taken perforce whence they joined the defence forces..thinking they were going to defend the country not invade...the world is small and we need love and peace to be harboured nurtured....against the collective forces of evil...why cant we work clandestinely towards peace?
    Why cant intelligence agencies send spies to spread peace?==Shubs
  • Aleahcim
    October 13, 2005
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    Important

    I've been getting poems like these in my e-mail, chain e-mails, and I have to say- Yours is a lot better!! Whether or not we "lose face" by pulling out is no longer important! (It never was important.) So many soldiers have died for no reason, and keeping the rest there is not "honoring" the ones who died! Sorry, for the tangent; nice poem, maybe you should circulate it. Then I wouldn't have to read any more "OuR sOlDjErS aRe DyInG fOr Us!!!!!!!!!" Happy Thursday

  • luckynsincere gold member
    October 13, 2005
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    Wonderful write Sandy... Our soldiers are so mighty and brave. We are blessed to have such teriffic guys and gals to protect our rights as a country. They need our love and support. This was a wonderful tribute.
    Always,
    Melanie

  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    beautifully done
    it's a sentiment echoed far and wide.
    to me this is a poem of strength and support...holds a good rhyme too...
    i applaud the poet and the poem

  • Vickie J
    October 13, 2005
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    Amen and amen!!! I'm proud of the soldiers and what they are doing but I pray the time will come soon that they can return home to their families. Everybody suffers in wartime-those left behind, as well. Well written-I love patriotic poems!!!

  • Image and Visions silver member
    October 13, 2005
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    good

    GOD BLESS OUR TROOPS, yes, yes, yes, and the object of war of course is to survive, I (and I hope we all of us) will pray to bring them home as soon as it is possible, because we know that they are there protecting us and our way of life. My time in the desert reflects much of what you said here. Add in the mulling of those around us, military and civilian, the sounds and sights of vehicle and the bustling of life around us, and you’ll have an accurate picture. Bring them home when the job is done and pray, the crazies don’t follow them here!!!! Image and Visions…..
  • ocerus
    October 13, 2005
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    This is a little simplistic and the rhythm could be better, but I definitely agree with the sentiment. God bless our troops, and may they all come home safe and sound!

  • whispersoftly
    October 13, 2005
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    bring them ALL home soon US or UK any that are serving and risking their lives for thier fello human being well done a wonderful write xx Cheryl
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