Glad it’s all done- should truth be told- pondering my latest scar
Pride we sow we humbly reap, hopefully my queen forgives
Small price to pay- her gentle scold- the shortest road- my last step home
Author notes
The sijo form – haiku's cousin – originated in Korea with the old songs of the Sylla empire (668-936) and the prose songs of the Koryo kingdom (918-1392). Near the end of the latter era, sijo came into its own, becoming Korea's most beloved poetry form.
Traditionally, the sijo consists of three lines of 14-16 syllables each with a total of 44 to 46 syllables per poem. A natural pause occurs midway in each line, each half line consisting of 6 to 9 syllables.
by Elieabeth St Jacques
Written October 13th, 2005
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thank you poet...larry
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The more I read this, the more I read into this. The shortest road home seems like the best to me, but it is not always this easy. Luckily, you only got a gentle scold. Nicely done.
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thanks for looking in at more of my poems...hopefully my queen forgives....this you can't make up...you have to live it...lol...thanks ..larry
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Exquisite!
I've never heard of this form before. Thanks for teaching me something new today.
Looks quite challenging.
The theme of this piece is original. I especially like "hopefully my queen forgives." Very nice indeed.
A joy to read!
Cris
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Look its me on this one to I think i like this kid of poems how do you do it?
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thank you poet...larry
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good
I like this style of poetry. I also, however liked how you used it in this piece. -
Thanks for the applause.I don't know why the message part is not working. Shahrzad
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thanks shahrzad...I like this form a lot...much like haiku...with more freedom...larry
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hmmm....That's a new style of writing I've never heard before.That's nice of you that you introduced that to us with this poem. Shahrzad
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I loike the way this piece was worded and the emotion behind it; however, I can not say I completely understood it. All I got out of it was that it was a love poem hoping for forgiveness. With this said, I did enjoy your poem. Maybe the fact that it is a mystery to me helps. Anyway I loved that you used a picture and explained what form you used. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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thank you Ros...your comments are so true...thanks again for looking in...larry
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They say pride comes before a fall.something we are all guilty of from time to time.Lets hope there is always someone there to forgive us, Ros
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thank you em...your comments are always a nice view of the whole picture...well done...larry
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so nicely accessed larry .... lovely kind of accepting and letting go in the first thought ... (a whew moment!) .... circumnavigating all the other emotions out into a let go lets see moment ... but comfortably .... fems love this ... heh ... nicely done .... really liked this one >>> EM
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It's a great day in new york...even with the rain...when I impress you my poet friend...lol..thank you ronald
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very nice
Larry I can’t help but to keep coming back to this lovely sijo. It speaks very well when spoken and if sung it would break hearts. Whew!
SirPort
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hello lencio...thanks for the great comments...congrads on your marriage to come...may the Lord bless this union...two hearts become one...pray together dear friend...always...larry
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Hi Larry,
I love the way you present to us so many different styles of poetry. thanks for inspiring. Beautiful thoughts. I liked this part, moreover now as my marriage days are coming closer, I too would wish the same - Hopefully my queen forgives, Ah! yes that is what is most important to know that someone who loves you will always forgive you, no matter what.
Thanks for commenting on my latest sonnet. I am so glad it caught your eye.
Love and light,
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thank you anna...your poet friend ..larry
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thank you my poet friend...ALL THE WAY...larry
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I read a whole story in these few words. I read it a few times now and every time I got more images in my mind. Very well done Larry. As always. Anna.
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good job
This is very tender of a sijo Larry. We done, well done indeed my poet friend. How very gladden am I to see this depth of feeling written in truth and humility, for someone as your Queen. There is so much here to be seen and felt, I must say. Oh “the shortest road”, this tells a tail for sure, and my favorite line, for it strikes home with an understanding.
I have read this many times now and let me tell you buddy, it gets deeper each time, has to be your best in my book.
SirPort
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thank you my poetm friend for your great comments...larry
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excellent
interesting form of poetry... very nice, gives you more room to explain something in, yet it forces you to be direct and clear about it...
loved the poem! soulfull! ur a very good poet!
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