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Fake pain

LOST IN HER DREAM OF HIM
SHE CAN'T SEE IT IS ALL PRETEND
THAT IT'S A LIE
SHE MADE UP IN HER HEAD
SHE CUTS HER SELF
SHE IS HER OWN PAIN
HER MEMORIES ARE FAKE
SHE WAS LEFT ALONE
SHE IS A MISTAKE
SHE IS HURT
BUT SHE CAN'T UNDERSTAND THAT HE IS FAKE
HER FRIENDS DON'T KNOW THEY NEVER WILL .....
SHE IS TURNING COLD
HER HEART IS ALMOST ICE
SHE CRIES ALMOST EVERY NIGHT
IF ONLY SHE WOULD REALIZE THAT IT WAS A DREAM
THAT HE DIDN'T REALLY DIE CAUSE HE NEVER EXISTED
IF ONLY EVERY ONE KNEW
THEY HAVE NO CLUE ......
SHE NEEDS HELP SHE'S IN PAIN .......
LOST IN THOUGHT
REALITY IS NO MORE PART OF HER DAY
THEY LOCKED HER IN A LITTLE WHITE ROOM
PUT HER UP SO NO ONE COULD SEE
HER FRIENDS DIDN'T NOT BELIEVE
THEY DID NOT THINK SHE WAS CRAZY.....
SHE WAS JUST IN PAIN
EVEN IF IT WAS FAKE
SHE HAD TO LIVE WITH IT EVERY DAY !!!

Author notes

FOR A FRIEND I WISH I COULD HELP HER BUT SHE IS IN ANOTHER PLACE ...............
Written October 12th, 2005

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  • SicTransitVictoria
    November 2, 2005
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    Great poem. I really am liking your writing! the only thing that I don't like is the all caps.. but thats too bad for me..hehehe. well now, I can definately relate to this poem. You write beautifully!


  • Alice Anesthetized
    October 18, 2005
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    pretty pretty

    Great job Asia!!!
    I love your work...

    -hatetofeel-


  • KissMyEyes
    October 17, 2005
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    OMFG!! i love this its amazing i wish i wrote like u.. u do it so freely and focused while i sit there for like a half an hour trying to think of a line,
    LOVE YOU!!
    Sara


  • silenced soul
    October 14, 2005
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    GREAT JOB!!!!

    HOLY CRAP stasier this was awesome i loved it so much the ending was so powerfull great job no serioulsyit was awesome and i loved it soooooo much great job!!!!!!!!this was great luv you lots~lissa~
    Edited on Oct 14, 2:56 p.m. because ''.


  • SkinTight
    October 13, 2005
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    Hey! this was a great poem! i loved it. its so sad tho. U have great talent keep it up! ~Jamie~


  • LilMissLoser
    October 13, 2005
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    wow this is just an amazing write...i hope you van find a way to help her...i've helped two of my friends and gradually my pain is decreasing...but lets just hope you can help...its just amazing the way you wrote this...its just plain amazing


  • myselfinthemaking
    October 13, 2005
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    I hope that you find a way to help her, and that she gets through her pain. Good poem.


  • nmbr1gothicchick22
    October 12, 2005
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    this poem is really good and i enjoyed it,its seems really kool.

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