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You know you have found love (Monchielle)

"You know you have found love"
to Lencio and Ashley
from Jim and Monica



You know you have found love
when all you have to do
is close your eyes and dream,
and when you can recall
each curve and ev'ry seam.

You know you have found love
when you can see yourself
reflected in those eyes,
and when your lover is
your soulmate and your prize.

You know you have found love
when you feel that you know
that person from before,
and when you hold on tight
you melt and you are more.

You know you have found love
when there's a special place
reserved within your heart,
and when you cannot stand
alone or be apart.

Đ Jim T. Henriksen
October 12th, 2005

Author notes

This poem was entered into poetking's contest "Speak out your love!"... Love is pure and great. Lucky those people whom it met.

This poem is a collaboration between myself and my wife Monica. I could not have done it without her. These words are inspired by things we have said to eachother through our five years of marriage.

This poem is in the style Monchielle, which is a form created by me, where first line repeats in each stanza, four stanzas in total, consisting of five lines, each of six syllables, and line three and five rhymes.
Written October 12th, 2005

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  • Starhiker
    May 8, 2006
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    Hi, poetking! Thanks for stopping by, and reading the poem. Too bad it didn't win anything, but I appreciate your comment! Jim

  • Monchi
    May 7, 2006
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    hei thanks for your nice comment, i currently not writing, bu i hope to start again soon,so i hope you can stop by to check the new ones soon, thanks again, love monchi!


  • sweethelper
    May 2, 2006
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    a very cute and lovely poem ! BEST OF LUCK INTHE CONTEST !

  • Starhiker
    January 9, 2006
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    Hi, Shahrzad! My wife is really wonderful, and she sais hello. Thanks for your wonderful comment, and your heartwarming applause! Jim

  • Ir.muse
    January 9, 2006
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    Dear Jim,
    I'm sure you have a wonderful wife.Please give my warm best regards to her.
    This poem is really lovely.
    Shahrzad


  • Starhiker
    November 17, 2005
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    Hi, virgo-mirage! Thanks for the wonderful comment, and the heartwarming applause! Jim

  • virgo-mirage
    November 16, 2005
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    Life is NothinG but a sweet miraGe

    i really like this poem!! im still goin through the rest of your poems but this one caught my eye its amazing! very expressing and sweet,, im such a hopeless romantiC ;p hehe way to GoO! keep it Up!

  • Starhiker
    November 15, 2005
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    Hi, Lencio! I am so glad you liked the picture I found for this poem. The monkey-dolls are called Monchi. Thanks for the comment! Jim


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    November 15, 2005
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    Awwwwwwww!!! This is so beutiful, very cute pic. This poem means a lot to me since it is the first time you created the Monchielle, and I know it's your favourite too. thaks for the add-ups.


    Lencio

  • Starhiker
    November 14, 2005
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    Hi, Stacy! Thank you very, very much for the great comment, and your wonderful applause (you can applaud it again next time you log on, I think ). Jim


  • J.J. Sass
    November 13, 2005
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    Excellent!

    Ah... love! This is a very beautiful write, and a wonderful dedication. The emotion in this piece is bursting from my cpu screen and I'm sure many can relate... I know I can Love is the most beautiful thing a person can ever experience, and you have certainly captured that effect here. And to do so with such astounding creativity! (I'd applaud you twice if I could)
    This form is beautiful; a great way to express !
    Well done, and best wishes to you always!
    Stacy


  • Starhiker
    November 9, 2005
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    Thanks, Cheryl! Your kind words warm my heart... Thanks for the comment, and the applause! Jim


  • whispersoftly
    November 9, 2005
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    this is amazing i love the words and the type of poetry well done for being brave enough to try something new its excellant the words are stunning and the flow is perfect i like the way you write xx Cheryl I applaud this


  • Ray Von
    October 25, 2005
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    I will, donīt u worry!!

  • Starhiker
    October 25, 2005
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    Thanks, Maria! Yes, you're absolutely right about the name of the style. Bullseye is worth 50 points in darts, so that's what I'm going to give you. No, don't return them, you've deserved them. Hope to read a Monchielle from you some day. Thanks for the comments, and for the applause, sweet AP-daugther! Jim

  • Ray Von
    October 25, 2005
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    Lovely

    I think I know why you called this Monchielle. Monica=Monchi. And elle, well that is at the end of most style poetry, Kirielle...etc
    Well I like it. The new style is great! I will try it sometime, if i get help with the syllable counts.
    Maria

  • Starhiker
    October 22, 2005
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    Thanks, Navdeep! I'm glad you like my poem, its style, its explanation, and its title (or did you mean MY name?) I appreciate your comment, and your heartfelt applause! Jim
    Edited on Oct 22, 3:17 p.m. because 'Small typo...'.


  • DamnUnique
    October 22, 2005
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    Awesome poem for your friends. I loved the unique and innovative way of inventing a new form and then, writing a poem in it especially as a tribute to someone. The form's amazing. Pretty clever and though somewhat tough to understand, it's brilliant. I loved your explanation. By the way, cool name.
    Well done. Keep writing.

  • Starhiker
    October 21, 2005
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    Thanks, Kitty! Yes, this poem is transcribed from the words of love that is etched in my heart... I am glad you have found your soulmate! It's a wonderful thing to find your soulmate, and some are lucky and meet that person while they still are single, like I did. I truely appreciate your comment, Kitty! Jim


  • Kitty Forlorn
    October 20, 2005
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    Deeply felt!

    Some pieces evoke the imagination through imagery. Some pieces evoke depth of thought. Yours most definetly brings out the emotion, and truly makes you feel.
    I love this interesting style, quite unique and clever.
    I absolutely ADORE when you speak of seeing yourself reflected in the eyes of your "soulmate" and also your reference to knowing the person before, wow! I understand this feeling and it hits home for me. Funny how you can feel so distant from some, like you just can't understand them, but then others you just seem to know so well, so quickly, like souls seperated at inception! I completely relate and that hit home for me, well said! It hit a realization too, thanks.
    I get lost and contentedly happy in these feelings.
    Love the title and theme too. Beautiful and thoughtful tribute, I am sure they will love, good luck!
    ~Kitty {{{{


  • Starhiker
    October 14, 2005
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    Aw, thanks Udit! Your words are really heartwarming... Thanks for your comment and your applause, my friend!

  • Starhiker
    October 14, 2005
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    Thanks again, Lencio... Please, come back as many times as you like. Especially if you bring an applause each time... Just kidding!


  • Starhiker
    October 14, 2005
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    Thanks Manoj! I truely appreciate your comment and best wishes!

  • Starhiker
    October 14, 2005
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    Thank you, Kris! Joyce sent you here? I have to thank her... Everyone on AP is an amateur poet, or else they would be world famous. Thanks for visiting my page and reading my poems!


  • Raazi
    October 14, 2005
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    What a tribute to Lencio! He deseves every syllable of this. Great Work, Jim! I applaud you!

  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 14, 2005
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    This is a brilliant piece, I visit this again and again, please do excuse me. I definitely like this form. Thanks once again

    Lencio
    Edited on Oct 14, 2:38 because ''.


  • Manoj Sanyal
    October 13, 2005
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    Fantastic tribute of friendship to Lencio and Ashley
    by Jim and Monica!
    Cheers for your thoughts on love and its feelings and expressions.
    Very well written.
    Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
    manoj


  • October 13, 2005
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    Wow, Joyce was right. You have a gift. I'm glad that I could read your poems. they truly are wonderful and most uplifting. I know in your eyes I'm an amiture, and I suppose that's true, but still..I have a nag for this kinda thing. Love it and the rest.
    -Kris


  • Starhiker
    October 13, 2005
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    Thanks to you for holding the contest, so that I could be inspired to write this poem.

  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 13, 2005
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    Yes, and I like the style Monchielle, well not sure whether it exists, no I dont think so. It is Amazing!!!
    Edited on Oct 14, 2:35 because ''.

  • Starhiker
    October 13, 2005
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    Thank you, Lencio. Me and Monica really are humbled that you like our poem for you two so much. Best wishes for your forthcomming wedding! ♥ Jim & Monica

  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 13, 2005
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    Dear Monica and Jim,

    I really dont know what to say. Oh God, it makes my heart beat faster and I am so overjoyed and nervous at the whole thing, really!!! God Bless you and God Bless Manisha, orionis for holding this contest in my honor. Thank you all so very much.

    Love and light,
    Lencio


  • Starhiker
    October 13, 2005
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    Thank you very much for your comment, Yunaleska! I really appreciate it! Jim

  • Naraku No Hana
    October 13, 2005
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    This is amazing!! It's so beautiful and lovely and I loved reading this. It has a lot of truth and love which people need. Great write.

  • Starhiker
    October 12, 2005
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    Thanks for a wonderful comment, sis! I believe Lencio and Ashley will appreciate these words. A truce? Hmmm... We could try, but I doubt it would last long. Thanks for the applause, it really means alot. Jim


  • sunny day
    October 12, 2005
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    Excellent work, filled with emotion!!!

    Hey bro, Another great work flowing from your pen I see. Marriage to your soulmate is so wonderful. You showed so much love in this poem that I am almost without words. I'm a woman though so that won't happen. What a lovely tribute to Lencio and Ashley you gave here. Words beyond reproach that flowed beautifully. Excellent choice of background as well. Geez, this sibling rivalry is hard. I propose a truce. We should always just write and enjoy ourselves. Thank you for sharing this excellent work with all of us and you most definitely have my applause here. Love and blessings to you always my brother and best friend. Joyce


  • Starhiker
    October 12, 2005
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    Thank you, Linda! I truely appreciate your wonderful comment, and your heartwarming applause! Jim


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 12, 2005
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    Jim this is absolutely beautiful, gorgious poem and tribute.keep up the wonderfully skilled work you bring forth..Linda

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