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The Devil Promised Me Words

The Devil promised me Words.
Endless flowing.
Soulful.
To impress.
In shitloads.

‘Three o’clock. Bring good punctuation, spelling and grammar’, the Devil wrote at the bottom of his note. It smelled of sulphur and strawberries.

So I scattered myself and climbed the flights, my breath stitching my throat.
‘Meeting the Devil’, the scribble I left specifically for my Editor sat, ecstatically, on my desk. ‘Will be back with more Words.’ He’ll be pleased.

Morning Allelse was forgotten.

I flip through my favourite pages of ‘Good Omens’ (the one marked and molested by me; signed, by Neil).

And here I am. Again.
Waiting.
Waiting for Aziraphale to kiss Crowley.
Though I'd rather the latter make the move: it would be night and he'd have his sunglasses on and he'd make the move.

They don't kiss, of course. And I curse both Terry and Neil for not taking care of that. How irresponsible.

Irritation revisits me. I stomp away, in a way four-inched heels would allow you.

People shuffle sideway glances at my limp.
They don't know I've gotten on the wrong train.



(I won't be getting my Words that afternoon.)

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Written October 12th, 2005

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  • gingergreentea
    October 13, 2005
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    I sense a little sarcasm here. don't worry. the devil can't write. the words he promised you--you and only you can manipulate them.

    will be back with some constructive criticism--if I can get some out of my head.


  • Joshua121
    October 13, 2005
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    I love the beginning of this and i lose it right about the time you get to the good omens signed by neil. its like you switched gears in the middle of the poem and afterword it requires some back knowledge as to who neil and terry are or Aziraphale.... i did however just look it up on google so now i think i understand a bit more it helps very much to know who you meant with neil and terry. i however havent read good omens yet. however i still like this work very much. very very nice.