THE SWEET BY AND BY
("There's a land that is fairer than day
And by faith we can see it afar;
For the Father waits over the way
To prepare us a dwelling place there."
--"In the Sweet By and By," Joseph P. Webster/Sanford F. Bennett)
We already know their days are numbered
as coarse winds cut wet hurricane breath.
It's raining harder now, manic gusts kick up.
Toppled church tower tolls, ipsissima verba.
And for those who can't move,
it is deemed they must stay here
with the mottle-faced Pontchartrain water.
Tolled strokes,
Take of this living water.
Hours are fleeting.
White caps lap at the gates to the lowland,
only hurricane eye knows what surrounds
the gathering gales, rising dark water.
Toppled church tower tolls, ipsissima vox.
Tolled strokes,
Take of this drinking water.
Time refuses to wait.
We imagine the dead and what they look like.
Dead eyes we'll never want to remember,
dead eyes we'll never forget.
Dead eyes flooded of rain waters
seemingly seek dwelling place
on that beautiful shore
in the sweet by and by.
(10/12/05)
js
Author notes
NOWAYJO
"ipsissima verba" = Jesus' own words, "The very words...I am."
"ipsissima vox" = John's Gospel translation of Jesus' words.
In a list
A contest entry
- Prewrites! by aeolia.
380 points, ended January 19, 2008, 116 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Sorry about the confusion with the categories! I'm finally able to see this (although it does look familiar...), and I'm glad. This is superb-- lovely imagery mixed with some kind of haunting story, great (and effective!) diction, skilled use of repetition... that last stanza is fantastic, too.
Thanks for entering! You're a finalist!
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The final stanza did it for me. You tied it perfectly & i'd love to perform this poem. mucho kudos. <3
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I have to say I found this piece disturbing, but not actually in a bad way. Please allow me to explain as I do not care for you or anyone to mistake my words for wrong.
I am a victim of hurricane Katrina. The images you have created with your words within this piece flodded my mind with horrid memories from that storm. It brought me back to that time, that moment when you realize just how lucky you are and how unlucky so many others were. It was a devastating storm and this is probably one of the closest renditions of such I have yet to read. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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Great entry!
Thank you. Great message.
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Let me say, this is a great poem. Clearly. You probably know that. But it's not really the kind of poem that I personally can appreciate. It's just not what I'm looking for. I do feel obligated to remove it from the contest because that's what I've been doing as I judge.
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I really do like this....Dead eyes..... it really stops people cold in their feet. You also did a nice job of mixing the religion of Christianity into a tragedy, which gave a regal tone. Great write.
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Okay, Jo, I see what you mean about the last stanza. My first thought was that it would be more powerful if written in present tense:
Dead eyes we don‘t want to remember,
dead eyes we can’t forget.
But that would involve changing the tense of the whole poem, and I don’t think you want to do that, so the one thing that really stood out to me in the stanza is the use of two present participles in a row, and I think that by changing one of them to an active verb it will help:
seemingly seek a dwelling place
on that beautiful shore
in the sweet by and by.
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Gorgeous! Your imagery is truly divine and the flow of this piece is so smooth. This is a wonderfully expressive and emotive write. Excellent! Thanks for your entry!
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beautiful
I agree one of your best, J
(Your style makes me able to recognize your beautiful work )
I remember being amazed by this before and now reading it again, I am just as capttivated...
Love the uniqueness and the true beauty.....
Excellent poetry!
Lynda
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Song?
I'm not sure if I was supposed to, but I kind of sang this in my head as I went. Very nice poem you've penned here. I hope you win something with this pc.
Tunk-
Hey when did he learn to use the computor? Git yah' dang dawg!!!
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So you were singing this poem as Dad was howling it...Is that it, Tunk? You know, once I find a perfect black lab background and a few more black lab images, I'm gonna talk Daddy into you having your own AP account! That way, you may very well even be the first canine to win a trophy here on AP! BOW-WOW-WOW!!!
Thanks to you both for these comments, and I guess starting this poem out with the song lyrics noted does put that music in mind.
Jo
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very good
this is a very lovely poem and touches the hearts of those who come to read,thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work
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Did you mean Pontchartrain?
Tolled strokes is unnecessarily repetitive. (As is the use of the word 'toll').
This almost has a beautiful tone to it. One of the things that trips me up is the italicized lines through out. I'm not sure what purpose they serve or if there really is one.
The Latin certainly looks cool. But I'm sure that helps the piece either. If we translate it: "...Toppled church tower tolls, I am" and "...Toppled church tower tolls, the gospel of John..." it doesn't really make sense. So, I'm not really sure why it's in there.
The repetition of 'dead eyes' is also distracting and cliched. I've read other things you've written and think you can do better. They are literally dead eyes, so what does that look like and why is it such a horrific image that I want forget but can't? How would I do this? Changing the channel? Stop reading the paper?
If the eyes are truly lifeless, show me how they are seeking and reaching. (Which could be a very impactual image with re-wording it).
I think you're on to something with this- but these are my concerns as a reader. It seems I'm the nay-sayer among the group who have read this, but I think my concerns are valid. If you choose to revise, please re-enter this.
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Thanks so much for your comments to this poem, Pozo. and though I had heard the Latin before as to the Bible interpretations, my Latin isn't so very good that I didn't have to research it to verify the spelling and which-was-which first!
Enjoy the contest!
Jo
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Wow
This was a great poem- it was topical yet had an air of the eternal about it 
Thanks for entering my contest I found this quite poignant and loved the imagery. The latin was cool although I wish I was smart enough to have understood it without the comments
All the best
Pozo
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Ha. Another poem I am unable to comment on. Anything I could muster would have absolutely no baring on this particular piece. It's too perfect. It shouldn't even be on allpoetry
It should be in a book somewhere!!
Thank you entering and reminding me that from the hundreds of poems I have had to judge a gem can still be found
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I only caught your comments to this poem again coming to this post tonight, Morgan...and gosh, I really am gonna draw a clause in my Last Will and Testament bequeathing this poem to you! If you recall, it was in those first few weeks of this poem having been written and posted here that you really offered some very helpful and valid critique to me as to the over-usage of the word "winds" in the poem that I probably would never have otherwise caught.
I really appreciate all your lauds to this poem...especially being someone who's always somewhat unsure of what I've written until being assured of it by writers such as yourself.
Thanks again, Morgan, and gosh...if I have any alias names here on AP, they're either 1. Not talking to me, 2. My worse adversaries with nary a good word to say about me much less anything I write, or 3. I have them on my Block/Ignore List so I can't see or hear them. You really have me laughing because that single comment left me in your post reminded me so much of something said to me by the EX at just about this same time last year...
Jo
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Read this if you are NOT NoWayJo
We meet again, worthy adversary! I still think this is one of the best poems on AP. Good luck in the contest.
HEY YOU THERE! READER! YES, I DO MEAN YOU!
This piece is genius. Even if you already agree with me, it is quite possible that you don't yet fully appreciate why.
Before you click any links, ask yourself the following question:
IF YOU WOULD CALL THIS POEM "EXCELLENT" (hint: yes), do you agree with any or all of the following seven statements?
1. The wording is impressive and elegant.
2. Latin is way cool.
3. It is profound/intriguing/[insert preferred synonym for "interesting"].
4. Bible stuff is way cool.
5. Poems about Hurricane Katrina just always get to you.
6. [Insert preferred one-line statement of praise applicable to poetry].
7. You're not quite sure what it means and/or why you like it, exactly, but the part about [insert reference to preferred part of this poem you're not quite sure about], was really amazing, anyway, and you wish you were quite sure about it.
Really? Well, I couldn't have agreed with you more on 28 November 2005, which was the first time I read this. There are some who have the ability to let well enough alone when they know that they like something, but aren't sure why. Since that is not one of my talents, I spent a rather ridiculous amount of time using the google search engine, wikipedia, etc., etc., etc. (etc.), until the issue was ultimately resolved.
If you are interested, I posted the watermelons of my compulsion to this very thread on 29 November 2005 at 9:32. Before you try and eat them, pull up www.biblegateway.com in a separate browser tab or window, because it'll be useful.
I'm agnostic, by the way, and I don't know whether or not Jo has any alias accounts, but if she does, "JustBe" is most definitely not one of them. In fact, if this poem is currently entered in Verbal Spurt's contest Perfect Prewrites [ allpoetry.com/Contest/221729 ], you may have noticed that I am competing against it. Yes, I think Jo's poem is that cool.6
Dammit! Go read my frigging review already! Then find my poem and read it, too.
~Morgan
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heartwrenching yet peaceful in it's own. I loved it and thing it is a masterful piece! Thanks for sharing and entering my contest GL to you!!
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Other than it was an interesting piece of writng I'm not sure what to say, Except keep it up.
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very good
it is very descriptive and has amazing
imagery:
Dead eyes we'll never want to remember.
Dead eyes we'll never forget.
Dead eyes reaching
you present an image to us that is heart
wrenching and then offer us a gentle
image at the end:
seeking dwelling place
on that beautiful shore
in the sweet by and by
very good job with this.
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I am another who is at a loss for words. Wow can't cover it and any others could never explain it. I just say wonderful job. FaeryPixiefey at a loss for words to say.
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kind of at a loss for words here. i've read all the comments too.
so very few written words yet so much said. if i had points i would applaud.
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Awesome
Everything else has been stated..... AWESOME WRITE. Moving... emotinally charged... Awesome. -
This was an awesome piece. I cant think of any other words to describe it..Thank you for sharing.
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Thanks for your comments to this poem, MoeJoe. Though it's difficult to write of such tragedies as Katrina, 9/11 and such, the best poetry follows some time following those events when they don't come off sounding as too-topical...Even to years and decades later.
If you don't mind I ask, please pass me a link to "Tears." I'd love to read it.
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This is a great piece of writing, I like the way you repeated the dead eyes. I find it hard to write of thing where so many poeple sufferred, I wrote a poem about 9/11 called Tears. Great poem
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thank you Gothic, I appreciate your comments. Enjoy the contest...You're bound to get lots and lots of great entries!
Jo -
beautiful, powerful. the imagery is explosive and beautiful. i can't really say much about this, the topic itself is a delicate subject. but you wrote about it fearlessly and boldy. with grace. thank you for entering write on
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a good piece, dead eyes, i wonder if they still see for a time after the body stops, makes me think of headless chickens for some reason! spill poetic ink and twist me into the wild crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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First to let you know I have editted my previous reply to you to account for your name in my response. Secondly to tell you that knowing your own caliber of writing, how you yourself speak from an internal sense to be understood outside of yourself to others, I'm more than flattered and actually feel honored that you have kept a copy of this poem outside of AP "bookmarks." I'm always so unsure of anything I write, Morgan, and I guess at AP more than other internet poetry venues, it feels that I can assess what I'm putting out there to be worthwhile or not.
For so many reasons, I appreciate the comments you have left me to this poem both back last November and now. It's just a sense that I achieved a POEM from both personal and long-distance emotions that I felt to express, yet the emotions linger and poems can't express...at least not one I've written.
Thank you for returning to this poem and remembering it and saving it to your WordPad and PDA and RTF and other technical stuff I'll never understand, as well as your comments always, Morgan.
and YES, "Crime and Conscience" would be an ideal entry to this contest...You have to KNOW I love that poem and STILL return to it again and again. Contest end is one day from now and I'm hoping you can squeeze it in by deadline!!!
Jo -
Just as excellent the 1,000th time
Whoa. I reviewed this so long ago (11/29--one month after I became a member, and way before we had any sort of rapport) that when I found it in this contest just now, I was very pleasantly surprised to learn that it was your poem. I've never associated your name with it, because I've never since known who wrote it. At the time, I had not yet noticed AP's bookmarking feature, and so the AP post went poof when I closed the web browser. I wanted a copy for future reading enjoyment, so I pasted it to Word Pad, but then forgot to include your name with the text. My only way of reading it has been via that .rtf document, which I have since kept in my filing cabinet and PDA. I've never shown it to anyone but my wife, so you can rest assured nobody has stolen it, and I'll obviously put your name on it right now. If you want me to get of the .rtf altogether, let me know (FYI I will be bummed--I still like to read it from time to time.)
I still think your poem is one of the best I have ever read on AP. That we agree on the word "best" makes it all the more gratifying to me that I spent so much time trying to understand what you wrote, and to subsequently convey how intelligent and well-written it is. Of all the poems that have taken up residence in my palmtop, only my wife's work and this poem were written by anyone other than myself. Good luck in the contest. Perhaps I'll enter Crime and Conscience. That would seem fitting.
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thank you Krystal...I do very much appreciate your comments to this poem.
Jo -
wonderfully put together, I liked the way the dead eyes were repeted in that stanza. it's a good look at the true possiblities and horrors that come with such an awesome display of natural power.
blessings-
Krystal
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This poem is awesome! Your writing style is so unexplainable. It is amazing!
Thank you for entering!
Daina
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thanks Rebeka...I had visited New Orleans only once, always wanted to go back. I just don't think it will ever feel the same going back though...
thank you again for your comments to this poem.
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oh this brings back so many sad memories of that storm and the helpless feelings...i used to ride my bike around ponchartrain and watch sailboats glide, buy sour dill pickles from a little store on esplanade..oh i grieve for those days gone forever.
your poem is strong and so so sad. i love it.
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thank you so much, Lynda...I truly do appreciate.
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A beautiful and touching poem!....you make heartbreaking breathtaking through your words...Amazing write, my friend.Lynda
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This is a beautiful and touching poem, u r a talented writer.
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Absolutely awesome write. Well written and thought out. This is also one of my favorite hymns. Debby
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An amazingly beautiful write.this poem seemed very deep.
Lots of emotions penned here. you must have really felt inspired by that and by the hurricane victims to write this.
I will say you have done a great job with this poem.
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it's an older poem, Rhymie which I wanted to bring back to the time of the hurricane happening. thanks for the read and your comment. I do appreciate.
Jo -
I don't know what to say. This is so sad. "In the sweet by and by, we will meet on that beautiful shore"... you must have really felt inspired by that and by the hurricane victims to write this. It was interesting.
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If you do visit on my poems, Andy, just to tell you to visit the catalogue titled my All Star Favorites...There's no telling what you may find in the other catalogues out there. I have been known to write a series of PIG acrostic poems which are strictly metaphor, but still...
and thank you for the comments to this poem. I do appreciate.
Jo -
Thanks, Jo, for your comments. I am glad that you like my writes. I will say this is an excellent poem. Conserving points, so I won't applaud, but you deserve applause. I am going to glance over your page, but if there are some specifics you would like me to know about you, please do tell me.
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thank you so much for the comments left to this poem, Sun. I truly appreciate.
Jo -
wow.. heart braking poem.. natural disasters are the worst, there is very little you can do to avoid them but a lot you can do to help the survivors.. excellent write!
HBH -
this poem seemed very deep... and i liked that.. i felt like you reached the end of waht is really there for the hurricane that some people cant reach.... i think you "know"... if you get what i mean.. you "get" what we went through, therefore you can write about it.. you 'understand' so you can write it... your poem seemed written differently then others... with a different context.... i loved... you are wonderful
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this is truely one of the most beautiful pieces of poetry i've ever read! i had to look up what ipsissima versa meant but i just reread it again and its beautiful, seriously im speechless....thank you so much for enetering my contest and good luck =)
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old Pinhead had this "unfair" contest thing, Ecrivan...I should've known better. LOL
I appreciate your comments to this poem so very much. I didn't want to exploit the politics within this poem to give reverence to the victims, the loss...and even now months after this tragedy and this write, it still feels those toppled church towers toll the same. thank you again your read and comment to this poem, I truly appreciate.
Jo -
Don't know what Pinhead said, but even great minds can be wrong, so we'll leave that and move on. This is an amazing write. I believe it's the best thing (of yours) that I've ever seen. Sadly, it's also true. That was a terrible thing that happened, and it's a black blotch on Dubya's record that won't ever be erased. Anyway, this is great. Keep on keeping on with these great social explorations.
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hi Nene...thank you so much the kind and thoughtful comments left to the poem. I truly appreciate.
Jo -
thank you so very much, Doug. I had no idea this was one of your favorites, I think it's one of mine too. thank you again always your thoughtful and kind words. I do appreciate.
Jo -
sorry for the late response to the comment left to my poem, Wanda. for some reason, it must've been lost among messages when I signed on and I only caught up with it tonight scanning through stray comments to my poems. I really do appreciate the compliments and thoughtful words left me, and again my apologies for getting back to you so late with my thanks.
Jo -
This is a wonderful work... very beautiful. The choice of words for this poem is fabulous and the content well it is amazing. This is a poem that brings hope to those in need... to those who have been through terrible things like a natural disaster. I really loved the reading of this work. Thank you for sharing with me and for the wonderful gift of your pen. Blessed be, Nena.
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This became one of the instant favorites I have of your poems, Jo. Quite poetic, hopeful, spiritual, and emotionally moving. Like many, I too was deeply affected by the tragedy that was the aftermath of Katrina, and here you give us a prayer and call for unity over such events.
peace
doug
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'...We imagine the dead and what they look like. Dead eyes we'll never want to remember. Dead eyes we'll never forget. Dead eyes reaching, seeking dwelling place on that beautiful shore in the sweet by and by.' An impeccable piece, Jo...quietly raging, whispering solace to those that can no longer hear us in this World...an impressive undertaking, my Friend...I wrote 4 poems in the wake of this travesty of a storm...one the night before it hit & 3 more after...I lived in Louisiana for 18 months...it floods everytime it rains...my best friend & goddaughter are still there...sighhh...Good luck in the contest, Jo...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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lol, antifair = anti Americanism...is that oxymoron?
This is a great piece. It is what it is, hang on and let the winds whip.
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yeah...I gotcha. something like the CIA or the FBI amongst us here at AP, seeing if we're anti-fair like it's anti-American.
Jo -
No, he lieks everybuddy, even gawd bettern me....I think he is in cahoots wiff duh contst person thingie fair stuff. theya re jsut pulling a prank on us and he's one of them.
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ooh gosh, what coincidence! I was just reading your sonnet, "Sick Schtick purr stir..." and I'm still laughing here. I was laughing so hard reading it when it came time to type comment my fingers weren't working! I think you won over Pinhead's unfair heart with that one...What a sonnet!!!
and I thank you for your comments to my poem and I'll keep it under wraps.
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Well, what does pinhead know....pinhead's a pinhead, and anasyu jut won't get that this one is almsot as good as my sonnet.
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wow Ana...I like your contest! already this comment from you has left me in a blissful, afterglow state! Pinhead never did anything for me like this in his contest!
Jo -
I think I've already commented on five entries, which goes against my own unfair rules, but to hell with it. This was breathtaking. You have some lines of pure bliss in there, surrounded by lines of orgasms. lol. I can't help but like THAT, now can I?
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Rob, I know what you said before in this poem's comments, but I was intimidated by contest stipulations here, you know? besides, you'll probably whip my arse in Zayra's contest...I feel those lashes already coming, so much I can't even open up your poem to read it!
actually when I saw the upside down man and his moustache on your contest page I thought, oh no, not another write a poem based on this image contest! you're actually very lucky I even participated in this contest after that scare!
Jo -
Yeah, what I said before. You know I love it.
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thank you so much your comments to my poem James. I truly appreciate!
Jo -
Amazing
A very complec piece in many ways, well perhaps challenging, which I think is a good thing, sometimes in an effort to make themselves uderstood writers dumb down, this challenges and that is what writing can do so well.
An excellent piece, from layout to execution.
Thanks for entering
James -
thank you Crivanea for your lovely and thoughtful comments to my poem. I really appreciate so very much.
Jo -
thank you for your eloquent and thoughtful comments left to my poem, Rob. I truly appreciate.
Jo -
Excellent
wow..that was lovely..wonderful job..a inspiring piece filled with sorrow..yet..a strange kind of beauty..anyway..the piece is intersting..very different from the other poems..but still...the words..and the phase..just something that we all can remember.."the sweet by and by"..good job -
This is beautiful. If only more "Christians" would put Jesus back into their vision. How the words of the origional "hippie" have been lost to those who perpetrate evil in his name is beyond me. Your voice is fresh and wholesome in a time when we need such voices. Charity begins in the heart. Thank you for this read.
Peace, Rob -
thank you so very much Loves. that's such a sweet compliment and I truly appreciate.
Jo -
Absolutely brilliant! I just dont even know what to say. I was literally drawn closer to the screen to soak in what I was reading. Very well done and it made me really think. Great write!
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I know what you mean about the "possessed" thing John...some poems do actually feel that way, especially afer writing them. it's like a different person or mental level must've kicked in.
I do appreciate your comments to my poem very much. I'll let the alter-NoWayJo know to thank you too when she's around.
Jo -
thank you Gran for your wonderful and thoughtful comments and the applause to my poem. I truly appreciate.
Jo -
Nothing short of fantastic Jo! You must have been possessed when you wrote this!
I've never been possessed, although I've been "had" a few times!LOL
Shinier trophy indeed!
Regards............John -
I too know the song with that title, and was intrigued with that at first. Caught me there. How you have taken something so terrible as the dead from Katrina and created this poem explaining a bible contradiction is quite 'brilliant' to say the least. Amazing...
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thanks XO...I really appreciate your nice comments to my poem.
Jo -
thanks Poetic...It's just the tune of Sweet By and By kept running through my head as I was writing this and then became the very feeling in the close of this write. I appreciate your very nice comments to my poem and thank you again!
Jo -
thanks so much Stone! I always appreciate your kind and thoughtul comments to my poems.
Jo -
thanks Cobalt. I truly appreciate your kind comments to my poem.
Jo -
this is incredible...im looking forward to your next <3
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a joy to read!
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Wow, Jo. Such strong language and a tone that just commands the reader. The imagery in this piece is fantastic and I love the characterization of the hurricanes. Fantastic. Good luck in the contest!
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Such true words in this poem. I do admire your ability to write a poem conveying this message
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First I want to thank you your wonderful comments and insight to my poem, Morgan. You have captured the very essence of my intentions of this write so very well. Although I'm by no means a Bible scholar, it's these very details and contradictions in Bible scriptures that intrigue me...and you have picked up on this better than any explanation I could offer.
Also, I understand your comment as to the multiple word "wind," I have also editted the second "wind" in this poem to "gale." It actually sounds better in this line, and I truly appreciate your second eye in catching this!
Thank you so much again your wonderful comments and helpful advice with this poem. I truly appreciate!
Jo
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Genius
Firstly, I would just like to sum up my thoughts on this piece with a single word: Brilliant. It is wonderfully and very intelligently written, and I think you deserve a shinier trophy.
It seems you are something of a Bible scholar. Your use of verse from John and Revelation is intriguing to say the least, and after reading this poem perhaps 10 times, I think I understand it. Correct me if I am wrong: The ipsissima verba ("living water" from river of life; Revelation 22) refers both to the choice given to the "righteous" and the "wicked" in the path of the hurricane (stay or leave) before the hurricane hit, and (since the words are from the Apocalypse) the "Sweet By and By" that the "righteous" seek after death. You refer back to the latter idea at the end of the poem. All of this is made quite ironic by the fact that those same people were killed by a river of death, as it were. Said river is described by the ipsissima vox ("drinking water," meaning the Gulf of Mexico, and the drinking water that was so scarce after the hurricane; "...Let him come to me and drink" --John 17) is a concrete paraphrase of the ipsissima verba, which therefore draws the two ideas together, and creates even more irony. The fact that John was paraphrasing words Jesus spoke at the temple when he proclaimed himself the savior and bid the people follow him is another deft use of metaphor. Amazing.
My one suggestion regards multiple uses of the word "wind," which sticks out. I think you should use synonyms (gale, squall, gust etc.) to avoid repetition.
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yes, it was written about Katrina, Adj. I appreciate your very nice comments and applause-thingy too!
Jo -
WOW
This is amazing. Simply amazing. I absolutely love the imagery and the way you captured the horror of Katrina. (This is about Katrina, isn't it? x] ) Keep it up, and good luck in the contest. -
thank you Vaseline...I truly appreciate so very much!
Jo -
And for those who can't move,
it is deemed they must stay here
with the mottle-faced Ponchartrain water.
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it's not a promotion of Christianity I was trying to develop in the poem Celtic, actually somewhat the opposite. I do very much appreciate your thoughtful and very nice comment left to my poem.
Jo -
i am not of the christianic faith, but i did enjoy the imagry and honest feel that this poem has produced. thank you for reading my work.
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thank you so much Heart. you have really commented so much what I really wanted to put out there with this poem. I didn't want it to harbang images of the tragedy like a photo-op...and your thoughtful comment let me know I did that. thank you.
Jo -
Sounds like the original author of the little quote you added finished the poem himself, btw the language made it all the more interesting. With these lines "Toppled church tower tolls, ipsissima verba. And for those who can't move, it is deemed they must stay here", to me sorry if it's a stretch but it reminded me of helplessness before faith, in times of tragedy it's really what we fall back on isn't it? Well anyways good job, and you can definately see the relationship to the hurricane.
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thank you so much your very nice comments to my poem No Longer...I truly do appreciate.
Jo
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