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Iris (Haiku)

Powder blue Iris
from morning's sweet dew
drips of natures kiss

  ~~Suseann~~

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Written October 11th, 2005

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  • Sparow
    May 6
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    this is nice too.....cant beat the garden after a good shower or watering..


  • Candy6
    May 30, 2007
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    a lovely haiku about irises. Purple and blue and yellow irises are so pretty.


  • Moonlit-Reveries
    January 31, 2007

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    your words paint such a beautiful picture. Your words are so soft sweet and picturesque. I love your picture as well.

  • pingpong
    January 16, 2007

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    WOW IM SORRY

    my bad about the last comment, i thought it was in a contest. i'm getting used to the next in list buttons and stuff. I AM SO SORRY.


    • suseann
      January 17, 2007
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      So you see PingPong,this being in the present tense and pertaining to an Iris is in fact a part of nature.The description below,and subsiquint examples are from Poetry descriptions on Shadow Poetry's site.




      Haiku
      Most popular definition, but there is more to haiku than meets the eye:

      Haiku (also called nature or seasonal haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three
      unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all. Haiku is usually
      written in the present tense and focuses on nature (seasons).

      The 5/7/5 rule was made up for school children to understand and learn this type of poetry.
      For an in depth description of Haiku, please visit the Shadow Poetry Haiku, Senryu, and Tanka
      section. There is much more to haiku than the made up 5/7/5 version.


      Example #1:
      Pink cherry blossoms
      Cast shimmering reflections
      On seas of Japan

      Copyright © Andrea


      Example #2:
      salt-waves caress sand
      tickling my toes and heart
      in their short-spun wake

      Copyright © 2002 Diana


  • pingpong
    January 16, 2007

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    iris-able

    speaking constructively, (having no experience in haiku writing nor being a talented writer myself), i think this is a well written haiku, but i'm not really seeing it's correlation to the guidelines of the contest. i think it's more about the flower than nature itself. beautiful haiku nonetheless.

    good luck in the contest!
    - pingpong


  • DogFish silver member
    December 18, 2006

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    A solid work.Each word contibutes to the whole.And the whole is aglow with a sweet moment of simple pleasure...

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 12, 2005
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    Beautiful image, nature's beauty knows no bounds. Just lovely.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    October 11, 2005
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    Very very nice suseann. You're really getting to be a true haiku'est Well done! Beautiful picture too.

    ~Lyrical


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    What a gorgeous photo to go with this poem. Think you need an ' in natures, Iris is a lovely flower.

  • montez gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    Have to agree with Sherry, this is a delightful little piece, though Haiku is, in it's restricting nature, one of my least liked forms.
    R


  • Sherry gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    Lovely picture and message sweetly delightful. Sherry

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