“It hurts so much” I tell him
~ but he doesn’t understand ~
he thinks the pain is corporal
like the burning from a brand.
I tell him it’s the emptiness
that echoes through my soul.
The barren wasteland of the dreams
that make a woman whole.
I’m down here on my knees
hands grasping at my heart;
and he thinks a pill will fill the void
that’s tearing me apart.
“It hurts so much” I tell him
as he joins me on the floor.
He begs me not to cry
this man whom I adore.
But the abyss is swallowing
and I mourn my sterile womb.
As the child we planned slips away
I long for my tranquil tomb.
I know that he should be enough.
I love him more the life.
But failure slices through my breast
I submit to the ravaging knife.
“It hurts so much” I tell him
but he’ll never understand.
Still, he gathers me close on the desolate floor
and soothes my soul with his hand.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
Author notes
I'm still not happy with the title of this poem, so if you have any suggestions please let me know. Patti
Written October 11th, 2005
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Heart felt and very moving
This is a superb poem and and I feel for you on so many levels. I wish you strength and that one day your dream of having a child will come to be. I can feel every emotion that you express in this poem and my heart goes out to you, more than you could ever know. Just know that you are not alone and besides your husband, there are others who also care deeply for you. Ta also for your comment on my poem and keep up the excellent work -
you sould call it
if men dont understand ...who will
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hey
i hate women beating aswell so i am glad i red this poam so i hope you will read my poam about it
i am only 13 but if someone is unhappy i will find out most my friends get picked on by boys so i realese my anger in to poams and some of them turn out quite good
i love this poam
lill
: : : : f: : : : : : well done!!!!
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Brillaint flow. One typo, but other than that it was written very well.
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It's a good poem, but it won't fit into the
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very touching and moving poem. you did very well in writing this, and I wish things were different for you personally. Please take good care of yourself.
I think just a title suggestion, since you have personalized yourself within this poem as narrator, perhaps "This Woman's Pain," but don't know...
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very nice write...you do a fine job of getting your emotions out in words i am very sorry for your loss..jaime
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Unknown Soothing... this is quite the heartwrenching poem you have penned here the emotions adn pain ebb with every line well done
love and light
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Awesome!!!!!!
Oh honey I can certainly understand your pain and I will let you know you are not alone. I still hurt from the loss of our first pregnancy and although it has been 9 years I can still feel his movement as if he were still incubating inside my womb...I developed cancer 4 years ago and they had to remove everything so there isn't even a glimmer of hope that I can ever conceive again. My husband doesn't understand why I still cry over this nor will he ever I don't suppose. I longed so much to have a little girl that I still dream of her. I have two wonderful boys, but I will always mourne the loss of him and the loss of the chance to have more. -
Great job i like this alot it has alot of emotion.. i like this line "I long for my tranquil tomb."
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How tragic, Have never had a miscarriage and have no idea how this would feel, but have known others whose life has been altered dramatically be this loss, especially if this is their first one. Until the next child comes along and is born, and even then, they always remember this loss. You have penned this well and we feel the saddness through the lines of the poem. Well written. As for titles, other lines in the poem would also do.
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