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A Fresh Start

Take your losses and
toss them aside.

Hold your head up with
dignity and with pride.

Brush yourself off it
is all for a good cause.

You have nothing to lose but
everything to gain.

So let your hesitations and
worries of your daily life.

Be blown away by a big gust
of twirling wind.

You will not draw nor lose
but only achieve.

At all the challenges and
misfortunes that life brings.

Written By,
BrendaKaye 2005

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A inspiration I wrote for myself.
Written October 10th, 2005

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  • xox Juicebox xox
    December 19, 2005
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    Such a lovely piece.
    I enjoy it highly.
    Good luck in my contest, sweetheart.


  • Macey Muse
    December 19, 2005
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    Uplifting

    I love your message in this, very true and uplifting, although the dark background led me to expect a depressing poem. It's interesting the way you rhyme verses instead of lines. I would suggest the use of enjambment in certain places, for example 'So let your hesitations and worries of your daily life. Be blown away by a big gust of twirling wind.' would make more sense without the seperating full stop. But other than that, well done!


  • mypassion
    October 14, 2005
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    Thanks Myth I am glad you enjoyed it. Brenda

  • mypassion
    October 14, 2005
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    Thanks divechica4, I try to look towards life and stride towards something more uplifting sometimes it doesn't work but this time it did.. THanks for your comment. Brenda
    Edited on Oct 14, 10:44 p.m. because ''.

  • teen-poetess
    October 14, 2005
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    Amen! There are so many dark, "Oh woe is me" poems out here (and I confess, I write an awful lot of them too) its refreshing to see a poem about moving on and being stronger than the darkness in our lives. Great write~


  • Mythtress
    October 11, 2005
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    Beautifully done! I do love the uplifting spirit of the poem. Write on, poet.


  • Sonja
    October 11, 2005
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    Great writen verses and great message also. I agree with you. We have to go on with a smile toward new life challenges.
    Nice background.
    ~Sonja~

  • Screaming Chimera
    October 10, 2005
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    Nice! i reall feel good poem. thanks for "perking" me up
    (bad choice of words there )
    Keep writting
    SC
    xXx


  • mypassion
    October 10, 2005
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    Thanks for popping in and leaving me your comment. God Bless
    Brenda

  • mypassion
    October 10, 2005
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    Thanks POP! I am glad you like this one. Have u come up with a nickname yet. In school people would call me Banana (thanks to that stupid game. I am going on a long journey and with me I took..Let me know,,Thanks a mill. Brenda


  • Something Real
    October 10, 2005
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    Good job and good rhyming!


  • EmsandAbs
    October 10, 2005
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    It's always nice to write about yourself you knwo make yourself think and be happy and push yourself...THATS WHY I LOVED THIS POEM!!! greta jod
    -Pinky

  • Kryer
    October 10, 2005
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    Pretty good. The ending left me off a little bit...but I liked the format and the wording.

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