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Reflections of love

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artwork by Lisa Morgan©2003(all rights reserved)



It happened on a silent night:

a night as black as coal.
No stars or comets graced the sky,

no sound did life bestow.
An ancient elm of gnarled bark

bereft of quivering leaf
cried silent tears of suffering

all lonely in his grief.

Why had he lasted all these years

while mantle at his feet
had withered with the rest; away

to decaying piles of peat?
He cursed the ground he cursed the sky:

Oh why; had life all shriveled and died
and left him standing here; atop
this balding hill alone?

But while he stood there self absorbed
reflections light the air,
for Evening’s song had heard her cue,
performances were rare.
She wrapped her veil around the elm
comforting him from heaven’s realm,
whispered mysteries in his ear
while dancing through his limbs.

Her gentle care had washed away
his momentary mood,
and turning ‘round to see her face
he exhaled from his roots.
She glistened and she shimmered
pirouetting on the breeze,
his heart no longer aching, then
he said to her with ease…

Aurora, Oh Aurora, thou hast shone on me this night,
thou hast taken me to bosom, taken my entire plight.
No longer shall I curse the land or air in which I breathe,
If I live to be a thousand years I’ll do as ye bequeath:
To be a landmark on this Earth so man shall always know
the forest is a blessed place, take time to help it grow.”

She listened to his newfound voice
with bark a mellow glow,
then winked and shimmied around his trunk
in scarf of silken flow.
Her spectrum fluttered in and out,
at last it’s time to flee--
In just a millisecond more
she bowed out gracefully.

Another eve finds moonbeam’s light
on breezes soft as zephyr,
a brilliance seen upon the hill
though it glitters it's not silver.
An ancient elm of gnarled bark
is standing; glowing still--
A statuesque magnificence
of what love can instill.



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Silver winner in contest allpoetry.com/Contest/1556170

Written October 10th, 2005

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    March 21
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    Thank you for your entry in our contest. You have told an interesting story in a very beautiful and inspiring way.
    We found the flow and rhyme to be a little shaky at times, but it did not detract from the overall piece.

    All the best in the contest

    Sue and Jeff


  • slipperssun gold member
    January 7, 2007

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    wow this is mesmerizing in the way that it flows and whatit tells us... you have done an excellent job withthis one...


  • paperparadox silver member
    November 27, 2006

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    Delightful and dignified. Great thoughts to bring forth from the picture ~ well done! We had lots of Elm trees around the fields of our village in England, but sadly they were all killed off by the scurge of Dutch Elm Disease in the seventies. Such a tragedy. As far as I know, they never recovered their numbers.

    Anyway, you've penned a great poem here, so keep up the great work!

    Kindest regards, Lou x


    • Sandi Alford gold member
      November 28, 2006
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      Thank you! :)

      Good day Mate! I always wanted to say that, now I have a reason

      Thank you so much for your kind thoughts and encouragement on this. I truly appreciate it
      It's a tragedy indeed when the earth loses a part of itself for whatever reason.

      Many blessings Sandi


  • wakingdevil
    May 24, 2006
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    Good!

    Score:
    Subject:3.3
    Rhyming:2.0
    Flow:2.4
    Total:7.7
    This was good and interesting to read.Thanks for your entry and best of luck in the contest!

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    January 1, 2006
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    Good morning, and Happy New Year!
    Thank you for stopping by to read my scribbles and for leaving your very kind thoughts behind, I truly appreciate it! Welcome to AP!
    Blessings Sandi


  • Petroushka
    December 31, 2005
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    Wonderfully enlightening! Terrific images and use of vowels sounds. To all things there is a season, and all things have a purpose. Often unknown to us it is frequently the simplest things that are the grandest!!
    I'm new here and still poking around. Great read.


  • Keith Drew gold member
    October 19, 2005
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    So sad and emotional

    I see the elm,the oak,the ash,the sycamore within thee lady.If you need solace,and comfort seek not the trees that all may see.
    Seek the tree that I alone do know of."THE WISHING TREE" read my words and see everything within a new light.


  • phattkat gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    Beautifully descriptive verse. A real classic, and a write to be proud of. The artwork is stunning as well!


  • Shancy Fayre
    October 16, 2005
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    This is awesome. The writing is extremely poetic. The imagery
    is lovely. The tree becomes alive and learn. I love this poem.
    Shancy.

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    Hi Di, thank you for reading and leaving your kind thoughts behind, I really appreciate it, and hey that's a good question! I have to ponder that one
    Sandi


  • October 16, 2005
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    Very beautiful poem. I love the flow and the imagery you've used here to link the poem to the image. Well done!


  • masterblaster gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    Hi Sandi, great poem, one small question should it not be thou hast shone on me this night and not shined? just a thought, lovely story line, great feel, you have my applause, hugs Di


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 16, 2005
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    well it is a great write revealing the philosophy of life through the story of a tree very sensitively . The thoughts are stated very beautifully depicting the emotions of the subject which have come out very communicative way. The immaagery is very strong and poetic structure of the write is the real strength of the write. The beauty of this write lies in its description part which is not only eye catching but as well as it is very deep in terms of stating the meaning which is long lasting too. The flow of the write is very impressive and to the point too. I must say it is just marvelous. Thanks for sharing it to the readers.prabhudayal khattar


  • Annalise
    October 16, 2005
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    Wow, Sandi. I'm truly impressed. The story, the rhyming, the flow...all perfect. The imagery...wow! This is a masterpiece, I could read it daily and never tire of it's beauty.
    Good luck in the contest (not that you actually need luck )
    Bestest of wishes and all that other mushy, gushy stuff ~Melinda~


  • ebaby
    October 16, 2005
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    awesome

    very beautiful poem and it is so story like I just love it!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    This was just beautiful, your imagery and emotion are carried throughout and the tone of this is loving. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

  • lady fally
    October 16, 2005
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    very nice

    You did a fine job on this poem. keep up the good work.


  • Krista Beth
    October 16, 2005
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    beautiful!

    Oh is this an amazing write! I did greatly enjoy it! It was a story and poem all in one. What a very talented writer you are! It captivated me and drew me in, feeling what the tree was feeling.
    I absolutely love this! You deserve gold for this piece!
    Krista


  • Titus gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    Really beautiful piece. What more can be added here but the sheer delight of woven fabric this literary agent has aspired to!!


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    Thank you for the read, I truly appreciate it and your kind thoughts
    Blessings, Sandi

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 16, 2005
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    Thank you Bronwen, I appreciate the read and your lovely thoughts The first think I thought about when I received the pic was the araura borealias, and well the tale was born
    Thanks again! Sandi


  • Image and Visions silver member
    October 16, 2005
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    beautifully written, I like the reassurance from those aroudn offering help.
    Image and Visions … Dare not only to dream, but do that of what others only dream of.

    If you have the time I would appreciate you commenting on my work. Thanks

  • Bronwen Eckstein
    October 16, 2005
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    Fantastic match

    Delightful the way you have woven the colours and rainbows into the words. A very good match with the image. Congratulations.

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    Thank you Faithful Dreamer, not only for your wonderful thoughts, but also for the inspirational picture!

    Wishing you all the best with your contest blessings, Sandi


  • zillion
    October 11, 2005
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    wow this is impressive. A story through a poem wrote off a picture, nhot many could pull that off. I do believe this is an amazing picture and its awesome that you could get something this beautiful out of it. Great job and thanks alot for entering my contest,

    -Faithful Dreamer


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    Thank you Sam, your most gracious thoughts mean the world to me
    Blessings, sandi


  • Samplette gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    You are an incredible writer. You have added an even grander touch with the music...excellent. Creative and well written. I wish you the best in the contest...outstanding work.
    Sam


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 11, 2005
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    Hermi you are the sweetest, thank you for your loving thoughts Sandi


  • Prince Charming
    October 11, 2005
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    Very beautiful written dear little angel. I like it every time how you work on your writes to make them perfect. Remember how you liked the picture from the start. How we talked about it. Like it said to me that it kisses the sky. You made your own wonderfum story about this great picture. A big hug for you little angel of my heart I love you Your prince your Hermi

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 10, 2005
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    Thank you Margaret for your wonderful thoughts my friend!
    I've been working on this for two solid days and actually varied more than one verse. The second and third are the same with a variant in the meter as well, then in the verse of his words to her, it's set as a sestet with rhyming couplets then finishing off the same as the beginning. Blahhhh, I'm so glad it's finished

    thanks again! Sandi


  • MargaretG
    October 10, 2005
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    It is incredible what you have found in this picture. Well done, Sandi, I enjoyed this story. The imagery takes me there, and the different characters each have their own voice. I noticed that stanza 2 doesn't have the same rhyme scheme.
    I did enjoy this, your rhyming verse is excellent.

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