It’s hours before the sunrise
On a dock by the waves rolling free.
There, stands a young girl,
Rose in her hand and eyes to the sea.
She dreams of the world beyond her
Of sails, the wind and the spray
And softly she breathes
Knowing the tears that beg her to stay.
And voyaging on through the darkness
With sails of shimmering blue,
A bearer of all that we cherish
In search of those so few.
The days, they go on forever
With dreams that may never come true
Still, we must all dream
For it is these that keep the world new.
The young girl has lost her teardrops.
There’s shimmering blue in her eyes.
For her the dream has come true
And may for you, in whose heart it lies.
And voyaging on through the darkness
With sails of shimmering blue,
A bearer of all that we cherish
In search of those so few.
The dawn brings about the sunrise
On a dock by the waves rolling free.
There, a withering rose lies all alone
By a clear morning sea.
Author notes
Written October 10th, 2005, one year before she died in a car accident.
A contest entry
- Dear Departed Friend by Misty Melody.
850 points, ended September 13, 2008, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dear brother:
Long time no see, how are you?
I love your poems very much!
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This is a beautiful, sad write. The imagery is wonderful and really creates the scene that the reader walks through. Sorry about your lose.
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wow...I could feel the cool ocean mist on my face and hear the waves as I read this. This is a beautiful poem. "Shimmering blue" is one of my favorite phrases...I love the imagery!
Excellent write!
Lorena -
beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. that's all I have to say.
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this is a sad but very beautiful write--well done, i enjoyed reading it very much. shaz xx
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I can see why you are a fan of metaphors! You write so very well and paint a fantastically shimmering blue picture! Good luck in the contest.
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Hi a very pretty poem with nice feel ,a sweet story line , a pleasure to read, all the best hope this poem does well for you, an enchanting read, hugs Di
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Great Job
Great job on this piece Jecks, good luck in the contest, this is beautiful! I enjoyed it very much! -
HOLY COW!!!! This was awesome, thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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Bravo!
This is so perfect it sent shivers. Loving the sea, the waves, the dreams the roses and the tides. sigh One can only wonder if.....
Excellent piece that stands alone outside the contest and subject matter. Truly a work of art. ~Pam
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Wow, this is incredibly emotional and so very sad. I noted that you had mentioned that you wrote this for someone prior to their death and it feels as if you knew that was going to happen almost.
How well you've penned your words that this flows well along with the tears it evokes in the reader. Very sorrowful.
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This is an amazing and beautiful poem. It draws so much emtion and tears just started flowing a little from my eyes. The flow is so beautiful writing as are the words you used for this. Um... the third verse the first line"The days they go on forever" I feel that in between the days and they, there should be a , but there isn't? I don't know if I read it wrong ( I probalby did )Other then that this is an amazing poem!
`kelly lin` -
Jicks, I am so impressed with your writing. You have drawn such a lovely portrait for the reader, and I am glad I had the opportunity to read this. Beautifully written! Hugs, Patricia ♥
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oh! Jecks this is beautiful, I love poems of sea/ nature at its best great flow and rhymes so nicely,keep penning and and I will try and get back asap. /hard to keep up with everyone,but this I am glad i stopped in.. ty for sharing,.. Linda
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