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Fallen Comerade

Today she fell into the sand ...all I could do was watch her slip.

I could not grab her because she was gone way too far.

We fought on many fronts, we played through time and today she broke.

The simplicity of this world has been made complicated.

Capitalism has killed another soldier but today it was close to home.

Money ...I once told you...'It's not important...'

And you thought I was stupid now look at you

You are drowning in your own pool of tears you call your misery.

Pieces of paper that supposedly should make you happier

instead look at you? You clutch at me with lies and I stand before you clear.

You betrayed you the minute you stole, you stabbed yourself the minute you

lied finally you tripped when you choose what was material over something you could never buy.

You think you have problems? Look at you- you are round in the most

beautiful way because you can eat. Look at your teeth perfectly straight.

Look behind you and at least 10 stand behind you.

We were alike once.

You have balls I'll give you that. To call me and throw your anger in my

face like spit. But I never moved because all I could think was ....I love

you what are you doing?

You dug your grave with every word you stabbed me with and all I did was throw you in...

I cared and no amount of money would have changed that.

You stole from me.

If you wanted me gone you should have said so.

If you wanted me dead you should have said so.

You said , 'You can always find a way around...' so then let me go.

But don't even take my forgiveness for granted

thank God my anger for you does not exist.

You would have hated life otherwise...but I will pardon your insolence

simply because you were once a soldier.

Rest in peace old friend ...because as I walk away now

Know that you will never have another ounce of my respect.

Lie with God because I can no longer help you.

And although I have chosen to forgive remember this....

I WILL NEVER FORGET!

Author notes

RIP...

commented on "Backstabber" and "How it feels."
Written October 9th, 2005

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    October 24, 2005
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    PS; it is EASY to judge something you have no understanding of simply because you have one perspective and it is fogged. I undertsnad what are trying to say ...and i will agree with you that I have not forgiven her completely hence the end of not forgetting ...but humility does not play here because I am tired of it ...you think i left the minute she stabbed me - no I stayed and tried to make that shit work ...you think there was no humility when she called and insulted me and i took it because i hoped it would work ....no do you think for one minute that i tried to stay her friend NO because you are quick to judge...again thank you for your comment though I will advice you that next time you do ...you should think twice about it. Dont judge something you have a vague if any understanding of... C O M A T O S E .