I sat among the dusky trees,
So blissful in my thoughts,
I did not notice that the breeze
Brought visions it had wrought.
The silver mist soon filled my sight,
My gaze looked full upon
The faery people gay and bright
Who danced all on the lawn.
Their clothes were of the finest silk
And trimmed with softest fur;
The maidens’ skins were white as milk,
Their scent, the finest myrrh.
They seemed to float above the grass—
Their feet ne’er touched the land!
The pond seemed as a looking glass,
Reflecting faces grand.
I saw the queen, all crowned with dew,
And dressed in jade sateen;
I wish that you had been there, too—
Her dress you could have seen!
Then dark sky filled with morning's light—
I wished that night would stay;
I'd watch again that lovely sight:
The shining, glorious fey.
Author notes
I wrote this for a contest, but also because I have had the idea in my mind for a while and needed to get it out. I have a habit of writing poems like this, I think, for I have quite a few, now.
~Amanda
Written October 8th, 2005
"Illusion"
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark, Love, Fantasy? by --Beautiful--.
550 points, ended February 18, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gentle Soothing Fantasy by Tablet Of Essence.
432 points, ended May 14, 2007, 10 entries
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615 points, ended May 26, 26 entries
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Wow! Welcome to the contest!
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This is very lovely,
Then dark sky filled with morning's light—
I wished that night would stay;
I'd watch again that lovely sight:
The shining, glorious fey.
You rhyme is very good, and it flows as gently as the images you portray.
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Through your words flows such as is the ways of the heart, whether they be good or not. Each see's something different as good of course but in the same in the end, for it may bring out the same out come. As long as it gets the message across I guess is the needed thing.Words what a world in it's self. Such beauty with just a shape of a pen or in thie case a mouse. What I read in your words is alot of hard work, which I am sure you know that. I got alot of good out of this write. and I would like to thank you so much for posting it in my contest.
Forever;
Etching Letters -
Through your words flows such as is the ways of the heart, whether they be good or not. Each see's something different as good of course but in the same in the end, for it may bring out the same out come. As long as it gets the message across I guess is the needed thing.Words what a world in it's self. Such beauty with just a shape of a pen or in thie case a mouse. What I read in your words is alot of hard work, which I am sure you know that. I got alot of good out of this write. and I would like to thank you so much for posting it in my contest.
Forever;
Etching Letters -
This is a great poem! Very good write. And i love fairies! Good luck and thank you for joining my contest!
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very well done all around, i really enjoyed this. I love fairies! you had a nice rhyme scheme with lovely images.
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awesome write
splended writing here.. well done just beautiful all around. thank you for sharing your words with me. good luck in the contest. -
Beautiful work you penned here Amanda... very delicate and with a beautiful theme. I really liked it. Thank you for sharing with us in the contest and for the wonderful gift of your pen. Blessed be, Nena.
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I love that movie, and the book that it was based on. It is a wonderful story of still believing in the Fae.
~Amanda -
Very beautiful work, and lovely imagry. It reminds me of that movie "A faery Tale: A true story" I love things like this, I love to believe that anything could exsist, and I like stories and poems that allow me to live blissfully in that fantasy. It has a perfect flow, the rythmn and word useage, your rhymn scheme, everything was wonderful. Thank you for sharing it and congradulations on that win.
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this poem is so cute and so magical at the same time. and of course i love it, because i absolutely adore faeries. i love how the rhythm is so smooth and timed, and of course how you use a rhyme scheme. it almost sounds like one of those old christmas poems. i love it!
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Thank you very much, sir. I appreciate it.
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*blushes* Well, thank you very much, but I must say that I do not think as highly of my poetry as many people on allpoetry do. My poetry simply expresses my feelings and thoughts about subjects and often there is not as much work put into it as there should be.
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Very beautiful. I have read several of your works and it is hard to believe you are so young! You have a wonderful way with words, you create a whole other world with the magic you weave in your poetry!! Great write.
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I have edited the poem, and it now reads much better than it did before.
~Amanda -
pretty damn good, the only gripe ive got is "The sky turned gray, and morning came;
I wished that night would stay;" something about this seemed to throw the rhythm off,
and " Thanks for clicking! You get an extra 3 points if you critique this piece, plus the author would appreciate it!
Vision of Faeries
by AerinAlanna on Oct 08 (Contest-Poem) (bookmark) (print) (next)
Author's Last Login: 3 minutes ago
In Category: Childrens, Nature, Other. 1 views this week. 17 total.
This was an entry for the contest
A Contest for Teenagers (13-19 years old). [Contest] by Zonia
Posted 4 days ago. Categories: Humor, Other, Personal.
300 points. Ending 2 days from now (Open)
Have a look......
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I sat among the dusky trees,
So blissful in my thoughts,
I did not notice that the breeze
Brought visions it had wrought.
The silver mist soon filled my sight,
My gaze looked full upon
The faery people gay and bright
Who danced all on the lawn.
Their clothes were of the finest silk
And trimmed with softest fur;
The maidens’ skins were white as milk,
Their scent, the finest myrrh.
They seemed to float above the grass—
Their feet ne’er touched the land!
The pond seemed as a looking glass,
Reflecting faces grand.
I saw the queen, all crowned with dew,
And dressed in jade sateen;
I wish that you had been there, too—
Her dress you could have seen!" - overall this is killer, but something about the last line seems weaker than the rest, perhaps it is the word could.
nicely done
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I have always wished to be Fey, but so far I can be so only in my stories. I have often tried, however, but failed miserably in my attempts to be as lovely as they, or as elegant.
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This is wonderful my friend! Lovely and a testament to your vast knowledge of the Fae. No doubt they are proud of their beautiful mortal sister...
~Li -
Thank you very much! I am glad to have provided entertainment for all of you with such a little poem.
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Bravo!
A fine, fine lyric poem of the Fey, not often enough seen in this day and age. Bravo! -
Loved it! It's a poem that would make you want to dream afterwards. It's a very nice feeling. Besides I liked to rhyme. I find it really difficult to rhyme and that's why I admire your poem.hehe..=)
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Yeah, very imaginary...
I love it...
faeries are cool.. I think they are like the hidden wantings we've got deep inside. Visible at night, forgotten in the morning.
Well, you made a pretty faerie-poem with this one...
lian -
This is a beautiful poem. You drew such a lovely image... Really wonderful. The rhyme and rythm is perfect as well. I love it.
Anna.
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Beautiful, well written
I really love it. It definately captured me with the title alone, but the whole thing itself made me smile, and I could picture it cleary. -
Thank you! I love writing faery poems, and this one just worked when I wrote it. If you like it, you might like "Faerie Knowledge", "Faery Maiden", and perhaps "Farewell to Fantasy", which I don't think is quite as good as the others, but is still pretty good.
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Awesome!!!!!!Spectacular!!!!!!!
"The silver mist soon filled my sight,
My gaze looked full upon
The faery people gay and bright
Who danced all on the lawn."
Your rhyme and rhythm are music to this mystical seekers ears!!!!!!!! Fantastic job hope you win the contest
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