We can sit and talk,
Our words hover in the night,
Tears roll down with relief,
One friends hand in another,
You don't feel the way I do,
But we'll be alright,
I know better than to loose you.
But where does all the lost love go,
It can't be seen where its not wanted,
Falling on the next person to smile,
Thoughts melt into confusion.
Eyes always on someone else's cause,
Another reason to fall for a lost cause,
Someone else I can never reach,
Someone else to call a friend.
Author notes
Umm.. things are pretty damn great.. just confussing love stuff... needed to vent.. cha 
anyways... havn't written for a while so...
Written October 8th, 2005
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everything is to darned confussin!...but this poem is great in showing this ...
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Tis all good
tis good how you can write how you feel like this... 
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Its not that... comments are welcome.. its juyst, you undertsnad its not always bout the technical bits... but about what you feel
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Oh... right... okay, well, not to worry, I was only trying to interpret it in my own way, but if that causes you problems, I won't comment in future.
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it wasn't supposed to be a reaching and inspiring poem... I wrote this for myself as a way to vent... no its not really about friends... well i suppose... i'm living up to the title of the poem.
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"Another reason to fall for a lose," for a lose? I think there's a typo or something here? This is nice. Haha, I was reading something a while back, it said never ever use vague words such as nice and ok. But, it is nice. I think the first bit's the best and I think it could be alright on it's own but the other two verses are okay. I guess it could just be about friends, but there's the whole "you don't feel how I feel" line which confuses it a bit.
I hope you get over your confusion, Julia's still here somewhere, hiding in the shadows, just shout any time you need to talk, if you want to that is...
J J xxxx -
Thanks for your comment
I'd love to read your poem!
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i know how it goes believe me...i just wrote a poem last night...i think you might like it....it's similar to your a little bit...it's great keep up...anna
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tee hee Is love ever simple? Thanks for the comment
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seems everyone now a days is cofused about love. your poem was good i liked it lots
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Thank you most muchly
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its all good
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