Affordable nonetheless beautiful,
with the crisp perfume of a wintry season.
Inspiring with every breath is the
fragrant prose of meaning.
Yet, those precisely placed words
remain a modest ramble.
The glittery tears of bottled emotion,
and an open mirror to gaze upon.
The jotting pencil with which I write
and the trail of a snail on a mission.
Though diamonds and gold are exquisite,
Silver reflects my soul.
Though roses and vanilla have aromas so sweet
These words are my subtle Scent
Author notes
I hope my poem is suitable, I tried my best to show what my name means and why I chose it. Thanks.
Written October 8th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Username Contest by Alexandra Saint.
300 points, ended May 31, 2006, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Very descriptive... nicely done... i don't have any critisism for this poem... good to know what your user name represents.. the piece was done well... keep writing
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Thanks for the comment. The structure is just free verse.
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B
This is very nicely written. I love the message behind it, and the last four lines seem very strong.
I found it a little awkward reading it: the poem seems to be structured like either a rhyme or rhythm poem, but it didn't come across as either. It was a good read, though. I really like the 'trail of a snail on a mission' line. I think that is a really strong line.
Kudos, and good luck!
Bekca. -
Great Poem
Beautiful poem SilverScent I enjoyed reading it
I loved these lines the most
~~~The jotting pencil with which I write
and the trail of a snail on a mission.~~~
Good Luck in the contest
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Thanks for your lovely comment. It means a lot.
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its beautifully written, no doubt about it. you did an excellent job, i loved the words you used. thank you for entering.
-Meg
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