My glass ceiling gets lower every hour,
with me screaming on the bottom.
This trasnparent case won't hold me forever.
Soon I will be nothing more,
than a shadow that once made a difference,
brought up every now and then in conversation.
Will you remember?
With your mediocre life, and your mediocre friends...
Will you ever think about what I said, or did?
The walls are closing in,
my time here is short so I’ll make it quick.
Close your eyes.
Look around you.
Breathe.
By the time it takes you to realize this,
it will already have blown away.
This unforgiving life doesn’t care,
and the clock will keep on ticking.
Before my ceiling comes down,
and takes me before your eyes.
In this hour I’ll tell you,
how much I’ve learned from you.
It's endless…
Tick.. tick... tick
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Written October 7th, 2005
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Abbie, WOW!!!!!!!!! You have so much talent!!! The imagery is amazing, I can picture it so vividly.
Great Job,
I love you Abbie -
This is a very powerful and very descriptive poem full of breath taking images amazingly and brilliantly penned it also has a lot of emotions penned in it thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work I will be back again..
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I could copy this and then post it under my name and then say it's for you. The end lines especially. You've tuaght me so much.
My only issue is this line:
"With your mediocre life, and your mediocre friends"
mediocre is a little repetitive, I think. It's your call, just a thought.
Do I even have to tell you how much I love you? I didn't think so. -
speechless...
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HOLY CRAP ABBIE!!!! this is INCREDIBLE!!! it might be the BEST thing you have EVER written! Wow - I'm just BLOWN away... all of the descriptions to explain how you feel is INCREDIBLE!! I'm amazed! This is great and from the heart! I love it! wow... that's about all I can say! I LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!! it's great to see another new poem from you!
~Lezli
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