Crimson tears splatter upon dark roses,
tainting the petals and rest on the thorns.
Opaque dreams filled with distant memories
falling down a blackened hole, it dawns.
Dragon king fantasies and starhiker skies,
ragdolls and barbies discarded aside.
Bells ring, calling out to these dreams
that show our true selves that always hide.
Heartless urges to prove ourselves true,
lunatick strikers that fight with the strength to go on.
Dead girls rise only to fall once again,
eyeless dancer among night hopes prolong.
Author notes
I know, weird. Including my favourite poets. See if you spot them (it doesn't have full names. Like 'crimson' for crimsonshadow. Whoops! Let one out. Sorry if I've forgotten you!)
Written October 7th, 2005
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thank you so much Lauren
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thanks Rose.
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thank for the comment
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thanks caz for your honesty. I really appreciate it.
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Okay, seriously, this was AWESOME, and not just because it contained references to the crew, so to speak. The way you worked it in was fabulously creative and it was beautiful and I really, really love this.
-Lauren -
My halfling and affair are in the same stanza as me! I love this, definitely! Another one to go into my faves, obviously! Yuna, you're more awesome than you'll ever give yourself credit for. *beats you with a bunny stick* STOP DOING THAT TO YOURSELF!
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hell yes!!!!!!! i loved this jess!!! thanks for including me!
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Jess, your rhythm is better - you're really starting to get an idea of flow. This poem is not my favourite as it has a very straightforward message, however, this was your purpose and I respect that. Some of the names were well woven into the piece, others weren't.
The imagery is fairly cliche in places but again this is due to your simple purpose. I like that you included me. 
Lol, love ya really. Caz. Xx
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