Butterfly flutters
In the pit of my tummy
I'm cornered and desperate
I want my Mummy!!
A noise at the door
A tap on the window
I drop to the floor
There's no way I'll go
Near to the glass
Where I see their masks
I hide and breathe slowly
Hoping they'll go away
There's no going back
Tesco is shut
and I'm completely sweet-less
and scared of those
persistent trick or treaters
Author notes
First time I've done this on line - it's a bit of fun
I have read and commented on The pains of trick or treating by tmullins and I kissed Her in the Rain by BadGothBoy
Written October 7th, 2005
A contest entry
- New Members Contest October by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended November 9, 2005, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Yep they are some spooky critters alright! So i guess we'll just have to get a whole lot more candy next year! cute poem! good luck in the contest!
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Funny, to me!
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Awww, your poem is so cute, i love how u made everything rhyme. Very cute. Best wishes.
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How funny! To be hiding from the trick or treaters. I guess I'm lucky that there aren't many children in my neighborhood, and thus not many trick-or-treaters. They can be mean when the candy's run out! Good job with this piece. Thanks for sharing, and good luck!
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Luckily for me, i live in England where Halloween is not that big a deal, and so a small pack of sweets usually lasts well. Having said that, i love the way you describe this poem. I found it a great read.
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Heeeeehee! You wrote about being scared about having not enough sweeties and candy for the people coming to the door! I like that and I like your poem very much and I will give you one of the clappy people things for making me smile and laugh and be happy and yay!
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I'm from Belgium, and we don't really 'celebrate' halloween over here... it's more like just having some parties in the area and throwing with fake spiders and stuff to each other
we've never had people on the door trick or threating, so I wouldn't really know how it feels to run out of candies 
lovely and cute poem you have entered here
thank you for taking the time to enter this contest and for following the rules as we asked
I wish you the best of luck!
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This had a nice cuteness to it that appealed to me as I read. It reminded me of when I was younger and hated Halloween because of the kids in scary masks and such. I think you did a good job with this.
~ John
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I think it was cute too. Very interesting point of view. Tony.
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Nice!
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I agree, some of those little tykes have some pretty scary masks. On the other hand some of the adults that open the doors and offer candy are quite scary too.. lol A very cute poem Thank you for the entry, best wishes and welcome to AP.
♥FifthD♥ve♥
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You've got lots of inuendos and bits and pieces that leave us with a twist of expectation. Well written for the most part.
Thank you and welcome to the site.
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Nice
I liked this poem a lot, the use of "Mummy" instead of the obvious really does incorporate a Halloweenie tone. -
this is a cute one. like the idea. way to go. good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for the advice. I hadn't realised this was what I had to do. I think I've done it right now? Appreciate your comment!
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Oh no
To run out of sweets on halloween.
I enjoyed this.
Please make sure you comment on anothers entry in this contest and write it in your author notes.
WElcome to AP and best of luck in the contest
Mia
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A nice write...I liked your second stanza here and word choice. Please don't forget to comment on another entry and put that title in your author's comments area. If you have any questions or need help feel free to ask any greeter. Good luck to you and welcome to allpoetry
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Enjoyed
Nice twist at the end- Shades of Poe's "Raven" only probably less welcome. -
Cute write-so easy to visualize what the narrator was going through emotionally that night. Nice job on this!~vj
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That first time is sure a different experience, isn't it Well, you did good, Virtual Velvet. A cute poem, well written.
Good luck in the contest and welcoem to allpoetry
Dee
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Nice poem. You might wanna consider reading and commenting on another poem in this contest and one anywhere on the site by any poet and putting the titles and authors in your authors notes. (press the edit link next to your name and the date and fill in the first box under your poem where it says "Include the following notes or requests to readers of this piece:"
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