Missing you is all i can feel
I'm trying to understand if this is real.
Sorrow eats you up inside, Pain is all you see.
Future mothers try to understand why?
when fathers sit
alone an cry.In this corner
i bare my feelings,
Trying to understand
life.
When there is no understanding or no meaning,
living it day by day
praying to god for a way to develope a love,
i once lost long ago.
Eyes of pain heart of grief,
feelings i keep inside.
lies stay lies promises will be broken,
confusion of not knowing what to do.
When you come to these feeling this way,
think of the love you were born with,
Not the heart ache that was left behind.
Life is a treasure we can only go by the path
we take an what we make of things for
those who didnt understand what some of my
words means is that something is gonna come
up an itll hurt but you have got to over come
the odds and be strong dont let life beat you down.
Author notes
i want to know what u think let me know
Written January 25th, 2003
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Awesome
I really love this poem i just wish my poems i write is this good. But u are a true poet. I would like to see more of ur poems on this site ~ Penny ~ -
don't touch it!
I agree with Mike. I found this a little hard to follow and would be easier to read in shorter lines. Still your talent shines through. A lot of emotions, which you expressed beautifully. I feel with some polishing this will be great.
~Kathy -
excellent
This was beautiful! You have a real talent. Though it might be easier to read if you broke up the longer paragraphs into shorter lines.
Mike -
excellent
This is true poetry at its best. Honest feelings and raw emotion. Very well penned. This was a beautiful and breathtaking peace. You definately captured love and all that goes with it. An underlying sadness that anyone who has felt love can truly understand. ~Amy~ -
don't touch it!
omg this is so beautiful
better than a lot of the stuff i've read
so. . . it's just so. . . . .~slams fist into desk~ damn it any word im thinking of is inadequate
but yeah it's beautiful
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