The young soldier shouted "who goes there?"
A voice came back "it is I Lillie a wood elf born of Tunare"
"oh, my dear"
"I am afraid you do not belong here"
"See, you have wandered into the Dark elf town"
"Here, Wood elf you will find no good around"
"But I was sent here on a mission"
"I must slay Srojo, the evil Dark Elf Magician"
"Ha, surely you are mistaken"
"If you try, then your life will be forsaken"
"You don't understand, Tunare has told me to do this"
"I'm sorry but she told me this was the reason I exist"
"I must destroy the evil, please let me by"
"Surely Druid, you know that you will die"
"This magician is destroying our trees and bears"
"I have to face him no matter my fears"
"Ok young one, you may pass if you must"
"I will come and watch you get crushed"
She entered the evil Magician's room
This will be no easy task she assumed
"So this is the one who was sent to kill me?"
"Young one your death is a guarantee"
"I am here to bring a stop to the death of our trees"
"You will pay for what Innoruk has taught you to be"
"You can not think you can defeat me alone"
"No one has been able to take away my throne"
"I believe I have the power to bring a stop to Innoruk's hate"
"I know in my heart, this is my fate"
"Ok young Druid lets let the battle begin"
"I call fourth Jabober, help me my pet to win!"
"I summon my mighty Bear"
"Help me to destroy the evil that lies in here"
"Attack my elemental of hate!"
"Attack my bear, don't let death be our fate!"
As the bear and the elemental were fighting
The Druid casted her spell of lightning
The Magician retaliated with a fire bolt
The damage was much greater then the Druid's Lightning jolt
As the Druid lay on the ground almost dead
She heard a soft voice she thought was in her head
"fight my daughter, for I am the mother of all"
"My young druid do not let this Magician be your downfall"
"I am sorry for I tried my best"
"But I am no different from the rest"
"No one has been able to defeat this caster of the stars"
"Not even the holy Paladin of Mithaniel Marr"
"Ok my Druid you have fought well"
"Now I will slay this Magician with just one spell"
Just then Tunare appeared
"Is that the mighty God Tunare that everyone has feared?"
"Well I know that I alone can not win this fight"
"Come fourth Innoruk help me defeat Tunare on this night!"
"My son, for I am the Dark Prince, I will finish what you could not do"
"But you too, my son, will be slain for not coming through"
Tunare shouted "Innoruk stop this madness and hate!"
"You know not what kind of demons you create"
"They are destroying everything good and pure in Norrath and our home"
"Tunare, don't you understand they don't do it alone"
"I am the one who taught them this hate"
"What you do not understand is I tell them there fate"
"Well your fate is decided tonight innoruk"
"Everyone in Norrath will celebrate this from Paineel to lower guk"
"Let the battle begin!"
The next poem will decide who will win =)
Author notes
So I am an Everquest player if anyone could not tell lol.
I have a level 70 Wood elf druid on the bertoxxulous server named Lillie and I am in one of the top guild's from that server. I take great pride in my Character so I decided to write about her =) I hope you enjoy this!
Written October 7th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Elves, Forests, Fantasy! by PerVirtuous.
3000 points, ended August 7, 2008, 31 entries
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awesome, love the way it sounds just like the game, and the ending is a great way to build the anticipation for the next poem, flow well enough, with just one down side, I found some of your rhymes were used multiple times, here and there, and that kinda breaks the flow just a little, but over all I say this was very entertaining and an enjoyable read, well done and thanks for entering! - Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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ney moon, interesting write and I liked the war, but it was a little hard to flollow. Never palyed everquest, I prefer non internet games, because I don't like to be rushed. I guess I'll have to do WOW though with my boys. good write image and Visions
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Pretty Good.
Hmmm...This was interesting but you might want to try to find a way to keep to speakers separate so people won't get so confused on who is talking.
Ah, I've always wanted to play Everquest but my computer is too slow for it.
The way the battle took place was reminiscent of a Pokemon or Anime battle. There was an awful lot of talking for a battle. But to each their own.
This was a fun poem to read but a little confusing as far as the dialogue was concerned.
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Everquest? Not sure if Ive heard of that before, but ok. To me the poem was a little hard to follow witht he dialog, but it is an interesting way to write a poem. Good luck in the contest.
Suzanne -
I used to play EverQuest... and then my free trial ran out, and I was too much of a cheap ass to go buy the game.
Oh well, that's a whole 'nother story. 
I really did like the game, and I'm actually saving up now, and possibly buying the full version of EQ.
I really liked the poem. It probably doesn't make any sense to someone who doesn't know about EQ, but I like it.
I didn't think it'd be possible to really write anything good about an experience with a MMORPG, but you made it work. The rhymes worked out really well using the names of the different places. Good job. I wish you the best of luck with the contest as well.
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Wow, very good use of game lore. I never played EQ1, but EQ2 is based in the same lore, so I am familiar with the names and places. Nice job rhyming. I hope you are going to submit this to the peeps who often publish poems and stories on the EQ1 site or one of the fansites. I think it is definately worth giving your gaming community a chance at reading it.
The only suggestion that I would make is that you break it into short verses of 4-8 lines rather than all one verse. I think this can be an enjoyable read for anyone who enjoys fantasy poetry even if they are not from Norrath, but readability can be hampered a bit simply by the layout. A lot of readers have visual problems, or attention span problems and breaking complete thoughts into verses helps alleviate that. I found it very enjoyable tho, even with my old eyes
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It becomes an addiction so quickly, yes? Good job telling the story to rhyme--not an easy task! Good luck in the contest!
Sheryl
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