bits of red and gold
land on my head like streamers
lost within my hair
~CT
Author notes
I've commented on Fall's Defeat and may comment on some others later.
Written October 6th, 2005
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Ah, I wish we had snow. All we got was rain
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~CT -
very nice
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The haiku is mature in all the ways that underscore your talent Carter. You handled the 5-7-5 form perfectly (even though I am acutely aware that you often use less syllable counts in other haiku pieces, consistent with modern composition). You also handle both the traditional nature and seasonal elements of haiku beautifully, even bringing in a bit of nice playfulness in the notion of the leaves of autumn falling on and getting lost in your hair. At its core, though, this has haiku's appreciation of nature -- there is a delight in the image you convey, and in how it is expressed. A perfect haiku.
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I can just see you standing under an old oak tree with leaves in your hair as a kid, (or adult) this is a very pleasant picture you have painted with this ku! Thank you very much for writing-for and entering this contest and for following all the rules. Best wishes
Cotton
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Oooh so cute, Carter! You sound like an adorable little kid in this 'ku. Goodluck in the contest.
Charishma -
This is so cool how you give autumn an anology. Beautiful imagery. Haley27
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Now I picture you to look like an autumn wood sprite This brought a cute image. Best wishes in this contest,
Reenie
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This is lovely, Carter- simply lovely. I can really envision hair all tangled with leaves... almost sexy.
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This gives me such a striking image!! How terrific to be truly dressed in fall colors!!! This is very beautifully done!! My best wishes to you in the contest!!! Karen
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